2011年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

2011年考研英语二大作文是启航考研英语备考清单中的必练题型。本文带来的高分批改范例，配套启航教育老师的逐句批注与预测话题标签，适合考研英语考生在冲刺阶段精读精练，是一套完整的写作提升资料。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the marketing percentage of some different brands in our country from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brands was 25%, but by 2009, this figure had gradually risen to 30%. Meanwhile, the proportion of Japan"s brands experienced a significant decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of America’s brands remained stable and steady.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people’s attitude towards consumption have undergone significant changes. They are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual enjoyment, preference for domestic products and value the cost-performance ratio. This explains why an increasing number of people choose domestic brand. What’s more, against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of Japan"s brands and America’s brands will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：different brands

批改：未点明 “品牌类型”需补充为 different car brands

原文：attitude

批改：改为复数 “attitudes”

原文：domestic brand

批改： “brand” 需用复数 “brands”

原文：preference

批改：名词，应该为动词短语，develop a preference for...

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the marketing percentage of some different brands in our country from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brands was 25%, but by 2009, this figure had gradually risen to 30%. Meanwhile, the proportion of Japan"s brands experienced a significant decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of America’s brands remained stable and steady.

批改：描写图表内容，符合题目要求

原文：The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people’s attitude towards consumption have undergone significant changes. They are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual enjoyment, preference for domestic products and value the cost-performance ratio. This explains why an increasing number of people choose domestic brand. What’s more, against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group.

批改：使用了表明逻辑关系的连接词，层次清晰，并且提出了自己的观点

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the number of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of Japan"s brands and America’s brands will likely continue to decrease.

批改：对未来的趋势表示预测，符合结尾段的逻辑

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11

这篇图表分析文围绕 “我国某类品牌市场占比变化” 展开，能清晰传递国产、日系、美系品牌的份额变动差异，核心信息明确。但在语法准确性上存在一些问题，注意单复数以及单词词性。希望继续努力，加油！

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