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一、2024年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should1) describe and interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2024年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The percentage of the learning knowledge about concern studies is the highest among all the four categories , at approximately 91.3% , whereas improving to do with hands , enhancing cooperation abilities , and others account for 84.8% ,32.6% ,and 54.4% respectively .
The fundamental factors that contribute to the aforementioned tendency may be expounded as follows .Firstly,the rapid development of information technology, which delivers unprecedented volumes of data, can empower individuals, providing them with a critical foundation to capture more knowledge.Secondly,Contemporary life is so dominated by stress that the pursuit of financial returns frequently overshadows the value of the ability of teams cooperating.Finally,rational choices shape our future. While the society diversity offers many ways, the decision to learning new thing can have profoundly positive consequences.
This trend , against the backdrop of the economic boom in China , will probably become dominant in the foreseeable future.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:earning knowledge about concern studies is the highest among all the four categories , at approximately 91.3% , whereas improving to do with hands , enhancing cooperation abilities , and others a
批改:learning knowledge about concern studies-> students who gain knowledge from the practice course (更清晰、准确的表达) improving to do with hands-> those who improve practical skills (更地道的表达) others-> those who feel happier (更具体的描述,避免模糊用词) ,-> , (应使用英文逗号)
原文:entage of the learning knowledge about concern studies is the highest among all the four categories , at approximately 91.3% , whereas improving to do with hands , enhancing cooperation abilities , and others account for 84.8% ,32.6% ,and 54.4% respectively .
批改: 第一段成功列出了图表中的核心数据
原文:,Contemporary life is so dominated by stress that the pursuit of financial returns frequently overshadow
批改:contemporary-> Contemporary (段落首字母大写) teams cooperating-> teamwork (更简洁的表达) the society diversity-> societal diversity (更地道的搭配) learning new thing-> learning new things (名词复数) can have profoundly positive consequences-> can have profoundly positive consequences (拼写错误)
原文:damental factors that contribute to the aforementioned tendency may be expounded as follows .Firstly,the rapid development of information technology, which delivers unprecedented volumes of data, can empower individuals, providing them with a critical foundation to capture more knowledge.Secondly,Contemporary life is so dominated by stress that the pursuit of financial returns frequently overshadows the value of the ability of teams cooperating.Finally,rational choices shape our future. While the society diversity offers many ways, the decision to learning new thing can have profoundly positive consequence
批改: 本段从信息技术、社会压力和理性选择三个角度分析原因,思路是好的
原文:nd , against the backdrop of the economic boom in China , will probably become dominant in the foreseeab
批改:结尾段对未来趋势做出了预测,这很好
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:11
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论证的深度:在提出每个原因后,可以再深入一步,具体解释该原因“如何”直接导致现象的发生,让论证更扎实。
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