作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2019年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语二作文真题常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、2019年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2019年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2019年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depicts the destination of gradutes at a certain university in 2013 and in 2018. In 2013, the percentage of continuing to go to school was 26.3%, but by 2018, this figure had substantially risen to 34.0%. In contr-ast, the percentage of working for a job experienced a significant decline about 7.4% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of having their own business remained stable and steady relatively.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. The initial reason lies in that as the conductor orchestrating the sumphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for further educ-ation. A more stuble, yet equally significant factor is that in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, graduates’ attitu-des towards their destination have undergone imp-ortant changes. This explains why an increasing number of gradutes choose to continue to go to school. Considering these factors, this phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trends?I am confident that continuing to go to school is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. Contrariwise, the proporton of wor-king for a job and having own business will continue to decrease and remain stable irrespectively.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:gradutes
批改:graduates
原文:for a job
批改:多余,删去
原文:having
批改:starting up
原文:The bar chart clearly depicts the destination of gradutes at a certain university in 2013 and in 2018. In 2013, the percentage of continuing to go to school was 26.3%, but by 2018, this figure had substantially risen to 34.0%. In contr-ast, the percentage of working for a job experienced a significant decline about 7.4% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of having their own business remained stable and steady relatively.
批改:能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容,内容完整,注意避免小的语言错误。
原文:sumphony
批改:symphony
原文:goverment
批改:government
原文:stuble
批改:stable?
原文:he core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. The initial reason lies in that as the conductor orchestrating the sumphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for further educ-ation. A more stuble, yet equally significant factor is that in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, graduates’ attitu-des towards their destination have undergone imp-ortant changes. This explains why an increasing number of gradutes choose to continue to go to school. Considering these factors, this phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
批改:能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义,能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子,使得句与句之间衔接连贯,望继续保持。
原文: for a job
批改:删去
原文:having
批改:starting up
原文:irrespectively
批改:应该是各自地,分别地,改成respectively
原文:What about future trends?I am confident that continuing to go to school is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. Contrariwise, the proporton of wor-king for a job and having own business will continue to decrease and remain stable irrespectively.
批改:分析并预测了未来的趋势,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:10/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变;语法方面,总体来看语法基础没有问题。
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的非常认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。一定要细心一些,注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。
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