2015年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2015年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二写作冲刺话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文

This is a column chart that clearly illustrates the remarkable contrasts in people’s costs during the Spring Festival in certain city of China.

Overall, the largest proportion of cost which is the new years gift it’s about 40%,the dinner for new year and the transportation expenses are both about 20%. Finally comes the others expenses,it’s also about 20%.

Such statistics can be associated with why the new year’s grift is important for Chinese?Then what resulted in this phenomenon?For one thing, Chinese people will visit relatives with a lot of gifts,because,they want to saying “happy new year”about their best friend and have a good wish for them in the new year. In evenings, people of china will make many food eating with their family .It’s an important tradition in china .On the other hand.the people in other city will buy the ticket of train to go home.

What about future trend? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the people miss their hometown, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：it’s

批改：is

原文：the dinner for new year

批改：聚餐可以表示为：gathering for a meal

原文：others

批改：other是形容词

原文：is is a column chart that clearly illustrates the remarkable contrasts in people’s costs during the Spring Festival in certain city of China. Overall, the largest proportion of cost which is the new years gift it’s about 40%,the dinner for new year and the transportation expenses are both about 20%. Finally comes the others expenses,it’s also about 20%.

批改：在描述图表信息时要注意语言的准确性。

原文：grift

批改：gift

原文：?

批改：句号

原文：,

批改：逗号去掉

原文：saying

批改：改成express表达

原文：about

批改：改成to表示“对，向”

原文：china

批改：国家名首字母大写

原文：china

批改：China

批改：逗号

原文：city

批改：cities

原文：Such statistics can be associated with why the new year’s grift is important for Chinese?Then what resulted in this phenomenon?For one thing, Chinese people will visit relatives with a lot of gifts,because,they want to saying “happy new year”about their best friend and have a good wish for them in the new year. In evenings, people of china will make many food eating with their family .It’s an important tradition in china .On the other hand.the people in other city will buy the ticket of train to go home.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词对图表中的现象进行分析论述，注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：miss

批改：改成missing，避免这句话出现两个谓语

原文：What about future trend? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the people miss their hometown, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，要注意区分词性及其正确用法，国家名首字母要大写；句式和语法方面，注意一句话只能有一个谓语。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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