作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2019年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语二大作文常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、2019年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2019年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2019年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The line chart clearly depicts different direction of graduates of certain university in 2013 and 2018. In 2013, the percentage of graduates who chose employment was 68.1%, but by 2018, this rate had substantially decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of those who chose to continue their studies experienced a significant increase of 7.7% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of starting one’s own business remained stable and steady.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1900s and 2000s, are accustomed to pursuing further educatioin rather than looking for jobs immediately. In addition, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling graduates to have ample oppertunities for further education. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of graduates who choose to continuing study will steadily increase in the following decades.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:direction
批改:表意 不明,可改为发展方向development directions
原文:certain
批改:前面要加冠词a
原文:starting one’s own business
批改:表达不完整,前面要加graduates,另外这部分要用复数,应改为:加graduates starting their own businesses
原文:The line chart clearly depicts different direction of graduates of certain university in 2013 and 2018. In 2013, the percentage of graduates who chose employment was 68.1%, but by 2018, this rate had substantially decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of those who chose to continue their studies experienced a significant increase of 7.7% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of starting one’s own business remained stable and steady.
批改:对图表的描述较为全面,但要注意单复数问题
原文:1900s
批改:毕业生年龄改为1990s比较符合实际
原文: educatioin
批改:education
原文:oppertunities
批改:opportunities
原文:continuing
批改:to后接动词原形continue
原文:The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1900s and 2000s, are accustomed to pursuing further educatioin rather than looking for jobs immediately. In addition, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling graduates to have ample oppertunities for further education. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
批改:从年轻人偏好和政府教育举措两个方面分析毕业生选择变化的原因,注意拼写问题
原文:hat about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of graduates who choose to continuing study will steadily increase in the following decades.
批改:表达个人观点,注意个别语法问题
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:11/15
题目要求:对漫画内容描绘较为全面,个别用词可以 再优化下;个人观点及论述内容符合题意;
语言表达:全文用了一些经典句式,存在少量语法和拼写问题,整体表达效果尚可,但也有一些提升的空间;
行文逻辑:第一段描述题干内容,第二段给出详细论述,第三段表达个人观点,架构完整;
修改建议:改正原文错误;继续多多积累经典句式;提高拼写的准确性;加强语法练习;
整体来说还不错,再加把劲会更好~
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