2013年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2013年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二写作冲刺备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the situation of college students choosing part - time jobs in a certain university. In the freshman year, the percentage of choosing part - time jobs was 67.7%, but by the junior year, this rate had gradually risen to 71.1%. In contrast, the proportion of senior college students choosing part - time jobs experienced a significant increase of 16%.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities to practice. In addition, an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, accumulating practical experience through part - time jobs is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of choosing part - time jobs among college students will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：of

批改：此处为学生的比例，改为 of students

原文：16%

批改：建议保留两位小数，和图表数字一样

原文：67.7%

批改：建议保留两位小数，和图表数字一样

原文：71.1%

批改：建议保留两位小数，和图表数字一样

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处细节表达问题，词汇表达不错，句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：细节表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改，数字保留的小数点位数要和图表一致。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的很好，加油！

考研英语二写作冲刺写作提分高效的方式，是让经验丰富的老师亲自批改你的作文。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，主讲斌哥亲批每一份学员作业，真题作业批改、轻松应对各种复杂题目，让考研英语写作更有底。