2011年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二大作文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The graph clearly depicts the dynamic changes in the market share percentages of different car brands in the domestic market in 2008 and 2009. The bar chart vividly shows that more people chose Japanese - brand cars in 2008, with the proportion being 35%, while domestic brands accounted for about 25%. However, this situation changed dramatically in 2009. The market share of domestic brands increased from 25% to 30%, that of Japanese brands decreased drastically from 35% to 25%, and the share of American - brand cars also increased slightly.

Multiple factors have contributed to this phenomenon, with the following being the most significant. First and foremost, domestic brands might have attracted more consumers due to their technological advantages. In addition, the government"s policies also had an impact on consumers" choices, as the government provided subsidies to encourage customers to choose domestic brands.

The above analysis indicates that choosing domestic - brand vehicles has become a prevalent trend among consumers, reflecting societal progress and people’s confidence in Chinese technology.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The graph clearly depicts the dynamic changes in the market share percentages of different car brands in the domestic market in 2008 and 2009. The bar chart vividly shows that more people chose Japanese - brand cars in 2008, with the proportion being 35%, while domestic brands accounted for about 25%. However, this situation changed dramatically in 2009. The market share of domestic brands increased from 25% to 30%, that of Japanese brands decreased drastically from 35% to 25%, and the share of American - brand cars also increased slightly.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：Multiple factors have contributed to this phenomenon, with the following being the most significant. First and foremost, domestic brands might have attracted more consumers due to their technological advantages. In addition, the government"s policies also had an impact on consumers" choices, as the government provided subsidies to encourage customers to choose domestic brands.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：The above analysis indicates that choosing domestic - brand vehicles has become a prevalent trend among consumers, reflecting societal progress and people’s confidence in Chinese technology.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：在第二段分析原因时，我们可以有两个选择，一是只分析中国品牌占比上升的原因，二是可以加上日本品牌占比下降的原因，关于日本品牌占比下降的原因，可以写日本品牌一些不当行为导致其声誉下降，进而影响其销量等原因。

整体来看，没有细节错误，但要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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