2013年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2013年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart vividly illustrates the situation of students’ part-time employment in each grade of a certain university. As is clearly shown in the chart the proportion from freshman year to senior year is increasing. The percentage reached its peak in the senior year, at 88.24 percent, while the proportions of the other three grades —freshman, sophomore, and junior years— are 66.77%, 71.13%, and 71.93% respectively.

Multiple factors have contributed to this phenomenon,with the following being the most substantial: first and foremost,as freshmen,they just entered a new environment and will spend more time adapting to it. Therefore,the proportion of freshman is the lowest among the four years. In addition,the senior students are going to graduate from college,they will step into society and workplace,and these part-time jobs can help them get used to work pace. And it can also help them identify their suitable career paths and plan their future in advance.

The above analysis indicates that part-time jobs have become a prevalent trend among students,reflecting societal progress.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：line chart

批改：line chart是折线图，应改成bar chart柱状图

原文：The line chart vividly illustrates the situation of students’ part-time employment in each grade of a certain university. As is clearly shown in the chart the proportion from freshman year to senior year is increasing. The percentage reached its peak in the senior year, at 88.24 percent, while the proportions of the other three grades —freshman, sophomore, and junior years— are 66.77%, 71.13%, and 71.93% respectively.

批改：将图表中的内容描述的很全面细致，注意看清是折线图还是柱状图

原文：the proportion of

批改：要表达全面，避免引起歧义：the proportion of finding part-time jobs for

原文：,

批改：独立句不能仅靠逗号连接，在逗号后加and

原文：Multiple factors have contributed to this phenomenon,with the following being the most substantial: first and foremost,as freshmen,they just entered a new environment and will spend more time adapting to it. Therefore,the proportion of freshman is the lowest among the four years. In addition,the senior students are going to graduate from college,they will step into society and workplace,and these part-time jobs can help them get used to work pace. And it can also help them identify their suitable career paths and plan their future in advance.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：The above analysis indicates that part-time jobs have become a prevalent trend among students,reflecting societal progress.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行分析总结，起到了点题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇掌握较好；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，注意英语语法中 “两个独立分句不能仅靠逗号连接，要加连词” 。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意观察图表。再接再厉。

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