考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2017年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一作文真题教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man sitting in the sofa and saying," I have a sea of books!” On the contrary, in the right-hand cartoon, there is a man sitting on the chair and setting a goal that he wants to read twenty books this year. And there is one sentence lying under the cartoons, "having books and reading books". Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that learning is the brush that paints a bright future, while just saying but doing nothing is the shackle that hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, the capability of learning has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident. On the other hand, Just saying but doing nothing not only hinders one"s success, but also acts as an Achilles’ heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.

In brief, life-long learning is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Additionally, we must be acuitely aware of the detrimental effects of lions in words and lambs in deeds to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man sitting in the sofa and saying," I have a sea of books!” On the contrary, in the right-hand cartoon, there is a man sitting on the chair and setting a goal that he wants to read twenty books this year. And there is one sentence lying under the cartoons, "having books and reading books". Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that learning is the brush that paints a bright future, while just saying but doing nothing is the shackle that hinders progress

批改：首段考生对图片信息的描述很细致，对例句中好词的借鉴使用很到位。

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, the capability of learning has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident. On the other hand, Just saying but doing nothing not only hinders one"s success, but also acts as an Achilles’ heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.

批改：对图片信息的背后因素挖掘很到位，可以看出考生有一定的英语水平，并会合理使用例句，内容完整清晰。

原文：acuitely

批改：单词拼写错误acutely

原文：f l

批改：of being，让 "lions in words and lambs in deeds" 作为名词性短语，与 "of" 构成介宾结构，语法逻辑更完整。

原文： lions in words and lambs in deeds

批改：给 "lions in words and lambs in deeds" 加上引号，明确这是一个固定表达

原文：In brief, life-long learning is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Additionally, we must be acuitely aware of the detrimental effects of lions in words and lambs in deeds to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：结尾符合结构要求，但与例文重合度较高

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/20

1题目要求：本篇图画信息重点是，有些人以为拥有很多书就足够，但是有的人脚踏实地的去读书，图片真正的信息内涵应该是脚踏实地的学习。

2语言表达：考生对图片信息的描述非常细致，但是在背后原因的深挖方面以及总结部分与例文的重合度较高。

3行文逻辑：首先，对图画内容进行描述。其次，中间部分对内容背后的原因进行深挖。最后，进行总结，在结构上面考生的这篇练习符合结构要求。

4建议：建议考生合理地使用例文，在例文中可以学习写作的思路、方法，但是不能与例文的重合度较高，要珍惜每一次练习机会，尽量在练习中使用自己的语言，不要害怕出错，只有出错才能知道自己在哪个部分掌握的不够。修正问题，才能持续进步，继续加油！

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