2013年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语二作文范文每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2013年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the change of students’ part-time job in certain university from freshman year to senior year. In the freshman year, the percentage of part-time job was 67.77%, but by the junior year, therate had gradually risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of part-tim job experienced a significant increase of 16.31%. from junior year to senior year.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, the university students believe that in moldern society full of change, challenges, and chances, the experience of work is indispensable. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to cofront immerse economy pressure, and as a result, taking the part-time job has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trend? I am confident that the percentage of take part-time job or university students will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：change

批改：changes

原文：tim

批改：time

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the change of students’ part-time job in certain university from freshman year to senior year. In the freshman year, the percentage of part-time job was 67.77%, but by the junior year, therate had gradually risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of part-tim job experienced a significant increase of 16.31%. from junior year to senior year.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：change

批改：changes

原文：immerse

批改：immense

原文：cofront

批改：confront

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, the university students believe that in moldern society full of change, challenges, and chances, the experience of work is indispensable. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to cofront immerse economy pressure, and as a result, taking the part-time job has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：take

批改：of是介词，改成taking

原文：or

批改：of

原文：hat about future trend? I am confident that the percentage of take part-time job or university students will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，名词单复数要使用正确；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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