作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2019年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语二作文真题常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、2019年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2019年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2019年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depicts the different choices for the senior students. In 2013, the percentage of employment was 68.1%, but by 2018, the rate has gradually decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of students who chose to continue study experience a slow increase of about 7.7% during the same period . Simultaneously , the percentage of students who wants to create their own business remains stable and steady.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes , our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for further education . Further more, an increasing number of people believe that in modern society full of changes, choices and challenges, knowledge is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run.
What about future trend ? I am confident that the proportion of employment will steadily decrease in the follow decades . In contrast , the proportion of students who want to create their own business will likely continue to remain relatively stable.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:study
批改:to study
原文:experience
批改:过去时experienced
原文:wants
批改:students复数,改成want
原文:create
批改:start
原文:remains
批改:remained
原文:The bar chart clearly depicts the different choices for the senior students. In 2013, the percentage of employment was 68.1%, but by 2018, the rate has gradually decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of students who chose to continue study experience a slow increase of about 7.7% during the same period . Simultaneously , the percentage of students who wants to create their own business remains stable and steady.
批改:能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容,内容完整,注意避免小的语言错误。
原文:The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes , our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for further education . Further more, an increasing number of people believe that in modern society full of changes, choices and challenges, knowledge is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run.
批改:能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因,全面细致。
原文:create
批改:start
原文:What about future trend ? I am confident that the proportion of employment will steadily decrease in the follow decades . In contrast , the proportion of students who want to create their own business will likely continue to remain relatively stable.
批改:能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:11/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,注意创业的正确表达;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变;语法方面,在描述图表时注意时态的正确选取,还要注意主谓一致。
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的很认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。一定要细心一些,注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。
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