2014年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2014年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二大作文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts changes in the town and country population in China. in 1990s, the number of country population is about five hundreds million more than town population, but in 2010 town population just over country population eight millon. The population distributiion more and more balanced.

The core reasons for the observed result can be summarized as follows. Frist, in the town the changes of finding work more than country, they will have better development. Their childrent also have better education, because many teacher work in the developed city. These factors all of there are reasons for the decline in the country population.

What about fiture trends? I believe that the above statistial figures accurataly and truthfully reflect the choices of people, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：in the town and country population

批改：改成：in the population of town and country ，这样表达更符合英语

原文：s

批改：就是年份1990

原文：hundreds

批改：当hundred前被数字修饰时不需要加s

原文：the number of country population is about five hundreds million more than town population, but in 2010 town population just over country population eight millon. The population distributiion more and more balanced.

批改：改成：The number of the rural population is about 500 million more than that of the urban population, but in 2010, the urban population was just 8 million more than the rural population. The population distribution is becoming more and more balanced. 加上that 指代前面提到过的population，否则含义不全面；the urban population was just 8 million more than the rural population. 是正确的英语表达，你写的有些中式。最后一句里缺少谓语动词。

原文：Frist, in the town the changes of finding work more than country, they will have better development.

批改：“the changes of finding work more than country” 是整个句子的核心信息，但没有谓语动词。“changes”这里应该是想写chances “机会”吧，和 “more than” 之间需要补充动词，同时 “country” 需明确为 “rural areas”农村地区以避免歧义。 “they will have better development” 中的 “they” 没有明确指代前文内容，无法确定 “they” 指的是 “找工作的人” 还是其他主体，需要补充或调整表述以明确逻辑关系。 建议改成：First, in urban areas, the opportunities to find work are more than those in rural areas, so people there will have better development prospects.

原文：childrent

批改：children

原文：teacher

批改：复数teachers

原文：all of there are

批改：改成：are all the

原文：The core reasons for the observed result can be summarized as follows. Frist, in the town the changes of finding work more than country, they will have better development. Their childrent also have better education, because many teacher work in the developed city. These factors all of there are reasons for the decline in the country population.

批改：论述原因的内容较少，可以在增加一些内容

原文：fiture

批改：future

原文：statistial

批改：statistical

原文：accurataly

批改：accurately

原文：What about fiture trends? I believe that the above statistial figures accurataly and truthfully reflect the choices of people, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：6/15

希望能够注意以下的小问题：

词汇方面：注意避免单词拼写错误，基础词汇一定要拼写正确，注意名词单复数的正确使用。

语法方面：注意句子结构的完整连贯，避免中式表达。

内容方面：第二段论述的内容不够全面

希望避免以上的问题。再接再厉！

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