2011年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二真题教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly depicts some kirds of category account for car market in China from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of China"s car category was approximately 25 %, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 33%. In contrast, the proportion of Japan’s car category experienced a significant decline of about 8% during the some period. Simultaneously, the percentage of UK"s car category remained stable and steady.

The core reason for the observed phennomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound car system, enabling people are willing to purchase domestic cars. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by china"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

what about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of China"s car category will steading increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of foreign countries will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： some kirds of category account for car market in China

批改：此处为一个名词短语，不能出现动词原形，且这个图表重点描述的是 变化，改为 the changes in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market 更精确地道

原文：China"s car category

批改：此处这个指的是国产品牌，改为 Chinese brands 更精确

原文：Japan’s car category

批改：改为 Japanese brands

原文：some

批改：same

原文：UK"s car category

批改：改为 American brands

批改：开头段内容表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

原文：reason

批改：下列有几个原因，此处改为复数 reasons

原文：enabling people are willing to purchase domestic cars

批改：最常用的表达是 enable sb to do sth, 此处改为 enabling people to purchase domestic cars more willingly

原文：china"s

批改：首字母大写

批改：内容表达不错，也比较具体

原文：what

批改：首字母大写

原文：China"s car category

批改：改为 Chinese brands

原文：steading

批改：副词修饰动词，此处可改为 steadily

原文：countries

批改：此处表示的是品牌，改为 brands

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心 3. 首字母大小写要规范，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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