2013年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2013年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文话题写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

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The chart shows a phnomenon about the part–time job of freshman,sophomore,junior and senior students in an university.The lowest percentage is from the freshman，about60.77%，and the highset from the senior,about 88.24%,and there is no exponential change in the middle part.

From the freshman to the senior students,it"s always shows increase linearly,the number of part time job has increment step by step,this is because when the freshman has matriculated,they usually spend the year excited,they had to get familiar with everything about curriculum and which club they"d like,so the freshman may don"t have too much energy or time to take a part time job.And when they became a senior student,they had less press from daily curriculum,and already familiar with the environment which they stay,and some students has found what career did they want,so before joining society,they"d like to accumulate some experience for the futur.

So,the chart not only shows the choice of college students of different grades,but exhibit a process of gradual growth of a freshman.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：phnomenon

批改：单词拼写错误，改为 phenomenon

原文：an 

批改：这个看单词的第一个因素，因为university是辅音因素开头，所以用a

原文：freshman

批改：这里应该为复数名词，改为 freshmen

原文：senior

批改：同理改为seniors

原文：it"s always shows

批改：it"s 和 shows不能同时出现，，改为 it always shows 即可

原文：increase linearly

批改：句子动词太多，可以处理为名词，改为 a linear increase.

原文：From the freshman to the senior students,it"s always shows increase linearly,the number of part time job has increment step by step,this is because when the freshman has matriculated,they usually spend the year excited,they had to get familiar with everything about curriculum and which club they"d like,so the freshman may don"t have too much energy or time to take a part time job.And when they became a senior student,they had less press from daily curriculum,and already familiar with the environment which they stay,and some students has found what career did they want,so before joining society,they"d like to accumulate some experience for the futur.

批改：整段断句不合理，基本是一逗到底

原文：increment

批改：increment 可数名词，改为increments

原文：part time job

批改：正确形式是 part-time jobs

原文： and which

批改：and 、which中间加 decide ，语意更完善

原文：freshman

批改：同理改为 freshmen

原文： may don"t

批改：may don"t have 错误，熟悉一下情态动词的用法，改为may not

原文：has

批改：主语是复数名词，不用变单三，改为have

原文：futur.

批改：单词拼写错误，改为future

原文：So,the chart not only shows the choice of college students of different grades,but exhibit a process of gradual growth of a freshman.

批改：第三段可以合理预测，大学生做兼职的比例会继续升高。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8分

从结构层面看，本文脉络还算清晰，采用三段式写作，开头清楚表明图片，中间进行了分析，最后总结段不够深刻，可以合理预测，大学生做兼职的比例会继续升高；

从内容层面看，第二段的分析完全融入自己的想法，犯了一些的语法常识，比如主谓一致、名词单复数、动词的变化形式，建议细化一下句子的成分。

从语言层面看，单词拼写错误较多，尤其是与主题词相关的重点单词，认真修改，考试时要避免。建议学着锦囊秒句先分析、模仿句子成分，加油！

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