考研英语一2011年大作文实例分析与批改

备战2011年考研英语大作文，先从研读经典高分范文开始。本文汇集的启航教育批改范文中，不仅有原文、批注，还有词汇注释与亮点解析。准备2027考研的同学，可联系启航教育在线咨询考研英语一写作高分规划。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon,there are two visitors,sitting on the boat,enjoying the scenery and littering casually,which polluted the river.Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environmental pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,environmental protection holds exceptional significance for a nation, as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for safeguarding public health,further propelling social stability and sustainable development. On the other hand,neglecting environmental protection is like a heavy chain that hinders our national progress,not only impairing the ability to maintain healthy growth, but also significantly affecting its international image.

How can we put end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal,including issue related laws and enhance supervision. But would these measures be comprehensive enough? In reality, we also need to instill the idea of environmental protection into civilian. With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：As shown in the cartoon,there are two visitors,sitting on the boat,enjoying the scenery and littering casually,which polluted the river.Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environmental pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：描述清晰准确

原文：issue related laws and enhance

批改：动名词，issuing enhancing

原文： civilian.

批改：复数

原文：The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,environmental protection holds exceptional significance for a nation, as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for safeguarding public health,further propelling social stability and sustainable development. On the other hand,neglecting environmental protection is like a heavy chain that hinders our national progress,not only impairing the ability to maintain healthy growth, but also significantly affecting its international image.

批改：论据充分，词汇和语法结构丰富

原文：How can we put end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal,including issue related laws and enhance supervision. But would these measures be comprehensive enough? In reality, we also need to instill the idea of environmental protection into civilian. With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：18/20分。

1.作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明，考试使保持这样的结构；

2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，非谓语结构和状语，强调句变化使用，体现了英语水平；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯，老师评卷时会非常喜欢；

4.根据自己的基础，要多内化老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，写作和背诵相结合，形成自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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