考研英语一2013年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2013年考研英语一大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the picture, there are many graduates standing on the crowdside, which directs to employing, studying deeper, going aboard and creating new business. Obviously, the picture intend to convey to the readers that which direction to go to is an issue that requires great attention both in we students and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, different ways for graduates should be equally treated. Nothing is superior unless we pay more attention to perseverance, which emable us fulfill our aspiration. On top of that, with the increasing number of graduates to study deeper, it is essential to think about the reason behind it.

In brief, where we go is the case we all need to meet. When facing this phenomenon, it would be advantageous if we determine to persist what we choose. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential. and make our world shine with renewed brilliance.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：crowdside

批改：crossroads

原文：directs

批改：direct

原文：studying deeper

批改：further education

原文：creating new

批改：starting up

原文：intend

批改：单三intends

原文： to

批改：后面没接宾语，去掉to

原文：we

批改：改成宾格us

原文：As shown in the picture, there are many graduates standing on the crowdside, which directs to employing, studying deeper, going aboard and creating new business. Obviously, the picture intend to convey to the readers that which direction to go to is an issue that requires great attention both in we students and in society.

批改：对图画中的细节描述的很全面，但是要避免小的语言问题。

原文：emable

批改：enables单三

批改：加to，enable sb to do sth

原文： study deeper

批改：have further education

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, different ways for graduates should be equally treated. Nothing is superior unless we pay more attention to perseverance, which emable us fulfill our aspiration. On top of that, with the increasing number of graduates to study deeper, it is essential to think about the reason behind it.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

批改：逗号

原文：In brief, where we go is the case we all need to meet. When facing this phenomenon, it would be advantageous if we determine to persist what we choose. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential. and make our world shine with renewed brilliance.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意主谓一致问题以及固定搭配的正确使用。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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