2021年考研英语一大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2021年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语一写作技巧备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、2021年考研英语一大作文题目

考研英语一2021年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below. In your essay, you should1)describe the picture briefly, 2)interpret the implied meaning, and 3)give your comments. Write your answer on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、2021年考研英语一大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there is boy dressing opera clothes and saying to his father that many classmates think learning opera is not interested, while the father encourages him to do what he likes. Eventually, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is sticking to oneself that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one had, sticking to oneself can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, reglecting to be yourself is like a heavy chain that hinder children’s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, sticking to oneself is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practise. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：interested

批改：interesting令人感兴趣的

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there is boy dressing opera clothes and saying to his father that many classmates think learning opera is not interested, while the father encourages him to do what he likes. Eventually, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is sticking to oneself that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：had

批改：hand

原文：hinder

批改：hinders

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one had, sticking to oneself can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, reglecting to be yourself is like a heavy chain that hinder children’s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

批改：能够通过正反两方面进行论述来突出论点，能够运用逻辑关系词，使得句子之间衔接较为连贯。

原文：practise

批改：practice是名词

原文：In brief, sticking to oneself is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practise. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误，注意区分ed和ing结尾的形容词区别；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意从句中的谓语使用正确。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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