2011年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2011年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二作文真题话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

Given is a column chart, clearly illustrating the remarkable constrasts in China"s market shares among Chinese, Japanese and American car brands from 2008 to 2009. During the year, the proportion of Chinese brands showed an obvious growth, from 25% to approximately 33%. By contrast, the proportion of Japanese decreased rapidly, from 35% to 25%. The proportion of American did not change at substantialy.

Such statistics, apparently can be associated with the intense competition between domestic and Japanese brands. With the improvement of China"s independent research and development capabilities in recent years, the technology of China has developed rapidly, then the quality of cars produced is getting much better. More and more Chinese customers prefer to buy Chinese brand cars. And partly because the influence of partrictism, Chinese people are not willing to spend money on other countries, but on own national brands. It can be seen that this is also a excellent opportunity to developnational brands and economy.

Accordingly, the country can seize this opportunity to improve new quality productivity. At the same time, Chinese car manufacturers are supposed to produce high-quality products and services to attract far more domestic and even international customers.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： at

批改：删除

原文：substantialy

批改：substantially

原文：Given is a column chart, clearly illustrating the remarkable constrasts in China"s market shares among Chinese, Japanese and American car brands from 2008 to 2009. During the year, the proportion of Chinese brands showed an obvious growth, from 25% to approximately 33%. By contrast, the proportion of Japanese decreased rapidly, from 35% to 25%. The proportion of American did not change at substantialy.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：own

批改：our own

原文：a

批改：an

原文：developnational

批改：注意单词空格

原文：Such statistics, apparently can be associated with the intense competition between domestic and Japanese brands. With the improvement of China"s independent research and development capabilities in recent years, the technology of China has developed rapidly, then the quality of cars produced is getting much better. More and more Chinese customers prefer to buy Chinese brand cars. And partly because the influence of partrictism, Chinese people are not willing to spend money on other countries, but on own national brands. It can be seen that this is also a excellent opportunity to developnational brands and economy.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：Accordingly, the country can seize this opportunity to improve new quality productivity. At the same time, Chinese car manufacturers are supposed to produce high-quality products and services to attract far more domestic and even international customers.

批改：总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：在第二段分析原因时，我们可以有两个选择，一是只分析中国品牌占比上升的原因，二是可以加上日本品牌占比下降的原因，关于日本品牌占比下降的原因，可以写日本品牌一些不当行为导致其声誉下降，进而影响其销量等原因。

整体来看，主要是细节错误，要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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