2013年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2013年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二大作文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in part- time job at a certain university. In freshman year, the percentage of students that take part-time job was 67.77%, but by the junior year, this rate gradually risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of students, doing part-time job experienced a

significant increase of 16,31% from junior year to senior year.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follow. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in 1990s and 2000s, are want to find a part-time job and have become the primary job way. In addition, as the saying goes :"On life"s stage, pressure is always present. " Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense financial pressure, and as a result , taking part-time job has emerged as their significant choice for leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenonin the chart is unsurprising.

What about future tends? I am confident that the proportion of taking part-time jobs among young generation will steadily increase in the follow decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：part- time job

批改：students taking part-time jobs

原文： freshman

批改：加the

原文： that

批改：人，推荐用who

原文：job

批改：jobs

原文：junior year to senior year

批改： the junior year to the senior year

原文： follow.

批改：​​follows

原文：1990s

批改：加the

原文：are

批改：删除

原文： reason

批改：复数，下面列了不止一个原因

原文：have become the primary job way

批改：模板套的生硬 改为making it a prevalent choice

原文： job

批改：jobs​​

原文：The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follow. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in 1990s and 2000s, are want to find a part-time job and have become the primary job way. In addition, as the saying goes :"On life"s stage, pressure is always present. " Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense financial pressure, and as a result , taking part-time job has emerged as their significant choice for leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenonin the chart is unsurprising.

批改：词汇和句法丰富

原文：taking

批改：​​students taking

原文：follow

批改：following

原文：What about future tends? I am confident that the proportion of taking part-time jobs among young generation will steadily increase in the follow decades.

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15分。

1.作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明；

2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，状语从句，非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯；

4.要多内化老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，灵活运用，形成自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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