考研英语二2016年大作文写作方向与示例

启航教育在考研英语写作教学中反复强调：词汇与句式的高级化是考研英语作文高分的关键。本文整理的2016年考研英语二批改范例，几乎每一段都包含高分替换词与衔接词，是考研英语二作文真题写作锦囊中的代表性范文。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the students" intention of traveling in certain university. Enjoying the view takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving the pressure at 33% Additionally, the factors such as making friends, fostering the ability of independence, and the other are also considered, accounting for 9%，6% and 15%, repectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, university students are no longer content with mere material satisfaction；they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why they choose travel in spare time rather than stay at school or home. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present" ，nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depieted phenomenon in the chart is unsuprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：certain university

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 a certain university

原文：33%

批改：加句号

原文：the other

批改：改为 others

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文： students

批改：加逗号

批改：结尾段表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处细节表达问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心 2. 标点使用要规范，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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