对于考研英语一而言,2011年大作文常以图画形式呈现。本文精解的这篇图画批改范例,启航教育老师逐句解读图画细节、寓意提炼与评论展开三步走,是考研英语作文万能句型图画作文的经典教学样本。
一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)
二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depicts the proportion of domestic cars market form 2008 to 2009. In 2008,the percentage of domestic cars was approximately 26 percent,but by 2009,this rate had substantially risen to 35 percent. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese cars experienced a significant decline of 10 percent during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with,against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development, younger generation, particularly those born in 1980s and 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition,Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by china’s automotive industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese car will steadily increase in following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American cars will likely continue to decrease.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:form
批改:from
原文:The bar chart clearly depicts the proportion of domestic cars market form 2008 to 2009. In 2008,the percentage of domestic cars was approximately 26 percent,but by 2009,this rate had substantially risen to 35 percent. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese cars experienced a significant decline of 10 percent during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady.
批改:能够准确地描绘出图表的信息,句子连贯完整。
原文:china’s
批改:China首字母要大写
原文:The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with,against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development, younger generation, particularly those born in 1980s and 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition,Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by china’s automotive industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
批改:能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义,能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子,使得句与句之间衔接连贯,望继续保持。
原文:What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese car will steadily increase in following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American cars will likely continue to decrease.
批改:分析并预测了未来的趋势,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:13/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误,国家名作为专有名词首字母要大写;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变;语法方面,总体来看语法基础没有问题。
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的非常认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。一定要细心一些,注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。
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