启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌,每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2025年考研英语二大作文批改例文中,每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正,是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。
一、2025年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2025年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should 1)describe and interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2025年考研英语二大作文批改例文
Simply and clearly, this bar chart displays the proportion of the main daily leisure activities of the elderly, which shows most of them prefer to watch TV and take a walk. The proportion of watching television and taking a walk accounts for 90.8% and 68.3%. Only few people are willing to read or grow flowers.
I intend to make some further analysis as follows. The reasons which most of the elderly choose to watch TV as their leisure activities are vastly complex. Some attribute it to that almost every family have televisions with the development of economy. They can hear and see what they want by televisions. Others attach importance to their health condition and high-rise building. This makes it inconvenient for the elderly to go outside and engage in activities. Besides, they may feel so lonely that they have to stay at home.
As discuss above, it"s a striking wake-up call to send us a significant information that we ought to spend more time with the elderly.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:Simply and clearly, this bar chart displays the proportion of the main daily leisure activities of the elderly, which shows most of them prefer to watch TV and take a walk. The proportion of watching television and taking a walk accounts for 90.8% and 68.3%. Only few people are willing to read or grow flowers.
批改:准确描述了图表内容
原文:few
批改:a few
原文:which
批改:先行词是reason,由 why 引导
原文:that
批改:attribute it to the fact is that...
原文:have
批改:has
原文:high-rise building
批改:这里不知道你想表达什么
原文:This makes it inconvenient for the elderly to go outside and engage in activities. Besides, they may feel so lonely that they have to stay at home
批改:这里跟前面逻辑好像连不上
原文:discuss
批改:As discussed above
原文:ove, it"s a striking wake-up call to send us a significant information that we ought to spend more time with the elderly.
批改:陪伴老人这个结论升华的太过,直接总结上面的情况即可。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:7分。
1. 题目要求:作文内容包含全面,层次分明,但是第二段往后的内容不够切题,存在逻辑不通的情况;
2. 语言表达:运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇,定语从句和宾语从句句型很棒;
3. 行文逻辑:建议加入逻辑连接词,提升流畅度和连贯性;
4. 建议:文章原创度很高,值得鼓励,同时继续深入学习老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型,利用最好几天,再提高几分,加油!
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