考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2017年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语一写作冲刺备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a young man, lying in a sofa and saying that so many books. On the contvary, in the right-hand portrayal, another young man says to himself, "I will finish 20 books in this year." with only a few books on his desk.Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future, while daydreaming is the shackle that hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, being practical can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand. Daydreaming can harm relationships, erode trust and respect, and cause the loss of opportunities and resources. It can also damage personal image and reputation, leading to exclusion and failure in work and social situations.

In brief, being practical is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydreaming to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：加上he has

原文：contvary

批改：contrary

原文：n the left-hand cartoon, there is a young man, lying in a sofa and saying that so many books. On the contvary, in the right-hand portrayal, another young man says to himself, "I will finish 20 books in this year." with only a few books on his desk.Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future, while daydreaming is the shackle that hinders progress.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

批改：逗号

原文：Daydreaming

批改：首字母小写

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, being practical can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand. Daydreaming can harm relationships, erode trust and respect, and cause the loss of opportunities and resources. It can also damage personal image and reputation, leading to exclusion and failure in work and social situations.

批改：能够通过正反两方面进行论述来突出论点，能够运用逻辑关系词，使得句子之间衔接较为连贯。

原文：In brief, being practical is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydreaming to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，注意从句成分的完整；语法方面，语法基础还不错。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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