2014年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2014年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二写作技巧备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes of population in city and countryside in China from 1990 to 2010. In 1990,the number of population in city was 300 million,but by 2010, this figure had substaintially rise to 666 million. In contrast, the number of people in countryside experienced a significant decline of 160 million during the same time from 1990 to 2010.

The core reasons of the observed phenomenon can be summerized as follows.To start with,as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremenduos etforts to develop urben economic. In addition, an increasing number of young people believes that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances,immigrating to the city is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am contident that the number of city population is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of countryside population will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：e changes of populatio

批改：the changes of population -> the changes in the population (

原文： number of populat

批改：the number of population -> the population (“population”本身即表示人口数量，直接使用即可)

原文：ubstaintially rise to

批改：substaintially rise -> substantially risen 或 substantially rose (时态错误。had 后接过去分词构成过去完成时，或直接使用过去式 rose)

原文：e bar chart clearly depicts the changes of population in city and countryside in China from 1990 to 2010. In 1990,the number of population in city was 300 million,but by 2010, this figure had substaintially rise to 666 million. In contrast, the number of people in countryside experienced a significant decline of 160 million during the same time from 1990 to 2010.

批改：本段清晰地描述了图表的核心数据和对比趋势，完成了任务。

原文：asons of the

批改：reasons of -> reasons for (固定搭配)

原文：ummerized a

批改：summerized -> summarized (拼写错误)

原文：menduos etfor

批改：tremenduos etforts -> tremendous efforts (

原文：rben econo

批改：urben economic -> the urban economy (拼写错误，且“经济”应为名词)

原文：believes t

批改：believes -> believe (主语 an increasing number of young people 是复数概念，谓语动词用复数形式)

原文：mmigrating to th

批改：immigrating -> moving to 或 relocating to (immigrating 特指移居入境，用于国内人口流动时，使用 moving 更准确)

原文：he core reasons of the observed phenomenon can be summerized as follows.To start with,as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremenduos etforts to develop urben economic. In addition, an increasing number of young people believes that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances,immigrating to the city is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：本段从“政府推动”和“个人选择”两个角度分析原因，思路是正确的，特别是第二个论点很好。但第一个论点“发展城市经济”过于笼统，可以更具体地说明这如何吸引人口（如：创造更多就业）。此外，本段语言错误较为集中，包括拼写、主谓一致和用词不当，影响了表达

原文： contident t

批改：contident -> confident (拼写错误)

原文：t about future trends? I am contident that the number of city population is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of countryside population will likely continue to decrease.

批改：结尾段对未来趋势做出了合理的预测，且与图表数据揭示的方向一致

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分

总体得分：10分

总评：

同学，你好！这篇作文结构清晰，准确地捕捉并描述了图表的核心信息，并且分析原因的框架也搭建得很好。

1. 语言方面：

你的主要失分点在于语言的准确度。文中出现了多处拼写错误（如summerized, etforts, urben, contident）和语法错误（如had rise, believes）。 immigrating 等词的使用不当，都影响了作文。请务必在完成后留出时间检查拼写和基础语法。

2. 结构方面：

文章“描述-分析-预测”的结构非常稳妥。在分析段，你提出的“个人追求成功”这一点很贴切！但“政府发展经济”的论述可以更深入一层，直接点明这为人们带来了具体的“工作机会”和“更好的公共服务”，这样论证会更充分、更扣题。

总的修改建议：

核心任务：提升准确性。请重点记忆图表作文的高频词汇（如urban, rural, population, increase, decrease等）的正确拼写和用法。写完初稿后，务必通读一遍，专门检查这些词汇。

将笼统的原因（如“发展经济”）与图表现象（“人口涌入城市”）用更具体的逻辑链条连接起来。想一想，经济发展具体是如何吸引人们的？

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