考研英语一2024年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2024年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一大作文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目

考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy, standing proudly in the park and saying, "The now park near my home is very nice!". Simultaneously, in the right-hand bar chart, the number park in a certain city experienced a significant increase of 264 from 2020 to 2022.

This phenomenon is thought-proucking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to build a sound exercise system, enabling residenter to have ample opportunities for further exercise. What is more, as the saying goes, "Onlife"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, residenter are compelled to confront immense life pressure, and as a result, dar exercise has emerged as their significant choice for utiling lelsure time.

In brief, contry exercise and build of park are the catalyst for societal and personal development from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate the practice. Only by doing so can we create a happier life, and build a more harmonious society.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：now

批改：new

批改：加of

原文：park

批改：parks

原文：In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy, standing proudly in the park and saying, "The now park near my home is very nice!". Simultaneously, in the right-hand bar chart, the number park in a certain city experienced a significant increase of 264 from 2020 to 2022.

批改：对漫画内容描述的很全面，语言连贯。

原文：proucking

批改：provoking

原文：goverment

批改：government

原文：residenter

批改：residents

原文：residenter

批改：

原文：dar

批改：daily

原文：utiling

批改：utilizing

原文：lelsure

批改：leisure

原文：This phenomenon is thought-proucking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to build a sound exercise system, enabling residenter to have ample opportunities for further exercise. What is more, as the saying goes, "Onlife"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, residenter are compelled to confront immense life pressure, and as a result, dar exercise has emerged as their significant choice for utiling lelsure time.

批改：论述的内容较为全面，运用逻辑关系词使得句与句之间衔接较为紧密。注意避免小的语言问题。

原文：contry

批改：拼写错误

原文：build of park

批改：building of parks

批改：加逗号断句

原文：In brief, contry exercise and build of park are the catalyst for societal and personal development from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate the practice. Only by doing so can we create a happier life, and build a more harmonious society.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误，以及名词单复数的正确使用；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯，要正确使用标点断句；语法方面，语法基础还不错。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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