考研英语一2023年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一作文模板每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2023年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2023年大作文题目

考研英语一2023年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay based on the picture below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2023年大作文批改例文

A fairly compelling sketch leaped off the page the moment I

caught sight of this test paper. As is graphically portrayed in this cartoon,

two sliders stand above the river and are excitedly saying that the

dragon boat competition of their village becomes more and more lively

with dragon boats sailing along the river. On the same time, crowds

Stand on the bank and bridge who cheer on competitors. It is a striking

wake-up call to convey us meaningful message that people nowadays

are attaching a growing importance to Chinese traditional culture and

rural vitalization.

Forty-plus years into the reform and opening up, the China has

established itself in a way that places a proportionate on culture

and equality over simply just economic growth. To be more specific, a

Society that is continuously transformed by traditional core values and

culture, the rural vitalization is underway. Starting from Xiaogang

village, Anhui, the Chinese rural area walks along a completely different

way to the vitalization, which stunning success stems largely from

Chinese faith on traditional culture and equity.

Anyone with insight wouldn"t deny the fact that Chinese rural

vitalization and traditional culture will further guarantee the boom

of this life-affirming force, ushering a new horizon for the great

renewal of a nation.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：y compelling sketch leaped off the page the moment I caught sight of this test paper. As is graphically portrayed in this cartoon, two sliders stand above the river and are excitedly saying that the dragon boat competition of their village becomes more and more lively with dragon boats sailing along the river. On the same time, crowds Stand on the bank and bridge who cheer on competitors. It is a striking wake-up call to convey us meaningful message that people nowadays are attaching a growing importance to Chinese traditional culture and rural vitalization.

批改：开篇句式多样，语言表现力很强

原文：On the same ti

批改：On the same time: 地道的搭配是"At the same time

原文：nd on the bank

批改：crowds Stand on the bank: "Stand"在句中应使用小写"stand"。此外，"crowds who cheer..."这个结构稍显松散，可以优化得更紧凑，如"crowds on the bank and bridge cheer for the competitors."

原文：ty-plus years into the reform and opening up, the China has established itself in a way that places a proportionate on culture and equality over simply just economic growth. To be more specific, a Society that is continuously transformed by traditional core values and culture, the rural vitalization is underway. Starting from Xiaogang village, Anhui, the Chinese rural area walks along a completely different way to the vitalization, which stunning success stems largely from Chinese faith on traditional culture and equity.

批改：本段视角宏大，尝试从国家战略层面分析问题，思想深度值得称赞。通过小岗村的例子联系现实，也使论证更具说服力。

原文：e Chin

批改：the China: 定冠词"the"在此处多余，直接使用"China"即

原文：places a proporti

批改：places a proportionate on culture...: "proportionate"是形容词，这里需要的是名词。建议改为"places greater emphasis on..."或"puts a higher premium on..."

原文：h stunning succe

批改：which stunning success: 这个定语从句引导词使用不当，导致句子结构不清。可以改为"and its stunning success..."，或者用"a path whose stunning success..."来重构句子。

原文：aith on tr

批改：faith on traditional culture: 固定搭配是"faith in"。

原文：one with insight wouldn"t deny the fact that Chinese rural vitalization and traditional culture will further guarantee the boom of this life-affirming force, ushering a new horizon for the great renewal of a nation.

批改：结尾段气势恢宏，措辞有力，"life-affirming force"和"ushering a new horizon"等表达非常精彩，成功地升华了主题。

原文：hering a new hor

批改：ushering a new horizon: "usher"作为及物动词，后面通常接"in"，即"ushering in a new horizon"。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15

评分理由：

亮点突出运用复杂的句子结构来表达，这是非常突出的优势。

总体修改建议：

同学，你的语言功底和思考深度都给老师留下了深刻的印象。你完全有能力写出非常优秀的作文。现阶段的提升，关键在于 “精准性” 。

在选用高级词汇时，务必确认其搭配和语境完全适用（如"wake-up call"）。有时，一个用对了的简单词，胜过用偏了的难词。

在书写复杂长句时，先在心中快速梳理其主干（主谓宾）和枝干（定状补），确保句子结构完整、逻辑清晰。宁可写一个正确流畅的复合句，也不要写一个结构混乱的冗长句。

将本次反馈中提到的如"faith in", "usher in", "China"不加冠词等知识点记录下来

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