2013年考研英语二大作文怎么写？附例文批改

思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向，本文呈现的2013年考研英语二批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面，逐段展示了一篇考研英语写作冲刺高分范文的诞生过程。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in part-time job situation among college students at a certain university. In the freshman year, the perientage of students taking parttime jobs was 67.77%, but by the jonior year, the rate had gradually risen to 71.93%. In constrast, the proportion of students doing parttimne job experienced a significant increase of 16.31% from the junior year to the senior year.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to promote cooperation between universities and enterprises, enabling university students to have ample opportunities to find suitable part-time jobs. In addition, as the saying goes, " On life"s stage, pressure is always present. " Nowadays, university students are compelled to confrent immense financial pressure, and as a result, taking part-time jobs has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of university students taking part-time jobs will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in part-time job situation among college students at a certain university.

批改：开篇点明图表类型（柱状图）和核心主题（某大学大学生兼职情况的变化），简洁明了，符合写作要求。

原文：n the freshman year, the perientage of students taking parttime jobs was 67.77%, but by the jonior year, the rate had gradually risen to 71.93%.

批改：试图阐述大一和大三学生兼职比例的数据，但存在拼写错误，“perientage” 应为 “percentage”，“parttime” 应为 “part - time”，“jonior” 应为 “junior”，影响信息准确传达。

原文：In constrast, the proportion of students doing parttimne job experienced a significant increase of 16.31% from the junior year to the senior year.

批改：想说明大三到大四学生兼职比例的增长情况，同样存在拼写错误，“constrast” 应为 “contrast”，“parttimne” 应为 “part - time”，且 “job” 应为复数 “jobs” 以与前文表述一致。

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.

批改：过渡句，引出下文对现象原因的分析，逻辑清晰。

原文：To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to promote cooperation between universities and enterprises, enabling university students to have ample opportunities to find suitable part-time jobs.

批改：运用比喻的修辞手法，形象地说明政府在促进校企合作、为学生提供兼职机会方面的作用，表达较生动。

原文： In addition, as the saying goes, " On life"s stage, pressure is always present. "

批改：引用俗语，为后文阐述学生因经济压力选择兼职做铺垫

原文：Nowadays, university students are compelled to confrent immense financial pressure, and as a result, taking part-time jobs has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time.

批改：分析学生因经济压力选择兼职的原因，“confrent” 拼写错误，应为 “confront”

原文：Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：总结前文原因分析，得出图表现象合理的结论，逻辑连贯。

原文：What about future trends?

批改：过渡句，引出对未来趋势的预测，自然流畅。

原文： I am confident that the proportion of university students taking part-time jobs will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：明确表达对未来学生兼职比例将持续增长的信心，观点清晰。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

题目要求：文章围绕给定图表展开，开篇点明图表展示的是某大学大学生兼职情况的变化，之后对图表中的数据变化进行了解读，包括大一、大三、大四学生兼职比例的具体数据及变化趋势，还针对现象给出了原因分析并预测了未来趋势，整体结构上符合题目中“解读图表并给出评论”的要求。

语言表达：在分析政府推动校企合作的原因时，使用了“as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes”这样的比喻，形象地说明了政府在其中的重要作用，为文章增添了一定的文采。

内容层面：始终围绕大学生兼职情况这一主题展开，从图表数据解读到原因分析，再到未来趋势预测，内容集中，没有偏离主题。

修改建议：仔细检查文章中的拼写错误，确保所有词汇拼写正确。

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