考研英语一2023年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2023年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一作文模板教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2023年大作文题目

考研英语一2023年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay based on the picture below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2023年大作文批改例文

What is depicted in this drawing is such a scene: two elder people, watching a match of dragren boat, say: "It is good. the dragron-boat match become more hot in our contryside.

Despite its simplicity, this picture conveys a deep message. It emphasizes the important of traditional culture and urges people to value it, as explained below. In the first place, among the trends sweeping across our country: moral enhancement, which indicates that some traditional values - notably, traditional Cutural -have been carried forward. Secondly. the trend is closely linked to change perspective on traditional culure. Last but not least, All kinds of media channels, Whether newspapers or the Internet advocate that we truly matter is protecting traditional culeure, not deserting it, encorrage people to prench it.

Considering the arguments made, it is evident that traditional awlure plays a vital role, and further actions are required.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：watching a match of dragren boat, say: "It is good. the dragron-boat match become more hot in our contryside.

批改：错误：① 拼写错误（dragren 改为 dragon；dragron 改为 dragon；contryside 改为 countryside）；② 大小写错误（the dragron-boat 改为 The dragon-boat，句首大写）；③ 语法错误（become 改为 becomes，主语为单数；more hot 改为 hotter，形容词比较级正确形式）；④ 标点缺失（句末补充引号和句号）。 修改：two elderly people, watching a dragon boat match, say: "It is good. The dragon-boat match becomes hotter in our countryside."（elder 改为 elderly，更符合形容 “年长的人” 的常用表达；a match of dragon boat 改为 a dragon boat match，固定搭配）

原文：It emphasizes the important of traditional culture and urges people to value it, as explained below.

批改：错误：词性错误（important 改为 importance，“强调…… 的重要性” 需用名词形式）。 修改：It emphasizes the importance of traditional culture and urges people to value it, as explained below.

原文：In the first place, among the trends sweeping across our country: moral enhancement, which indicates that some traditional values - notably, traditional Cutural -have been carried forward.

批改：错误：① 标点错误（冒号改为逗号，此处为介词短语后的举例，非解释说明）；② 拼写错误（Cutural 改为 Culture）；③ 大小写错误（Cutural 改为 Culture，首字母大写）；④ 连字符规范（改为破折号 “——”，或保留连字符并调整空格）。 修改：In the first place, among the trends sweeping across our country, moral enhancement indicates that some traditional values — notably, traditional culture — have been carried forward.（删除多余 which，使句子更简洁；调整标点使逻辑更清晰）

原文：the trend is closely linked to change perspective on traditional culure

批改：错误：① 标点错误（句号改为逗号，Secondly 后用逗号）；② 拼写错误（culure 改为 culture）；③ 语法错误（change 改为 changing，link to 后接动名词；perspective 改为 perspectives，用复数表泛指）。 修改：Secondly, the trend is closely linked to changing perspectives on traditional culture.

原文：Whether newspapers or the Internet advocate that we truly matter is protecting traditional culeure, not deserting it, encorrage people to prench it.

批改：错误：① 大小写错误（All 改为 all，句中单词小写；Whether 改为 whether，非句首无需大写）；② 拼写错误（culeure 改为 culture；encorrage 改为 encourage；prench 改为 promote，“推广” 符合语义）；③ 语法混乱（that 后从句结构错误，改为 that what truly matters is protecting...；advocate 与 encourage 为并列谓语，需用 and 连接）；④ 标点缺失（Internet 后加逗号）。 修改：Last but not least, all kinds of media channels, whether newspapers or the Internet, advocate that what truly matters is protecting traditional culture, not deserting it, and encourage people to promote it.

原文：Considering the arguments made, it is evident that traditional awlure plays a vital role, and further actions are required.

批改：错误：① 重复冗余（删除重复句）；② 拼写错误（awlure 改为 culture）；③ 大小写错误（the arguments 改为 The arguments，句首大写）。 修改：Considering the arguments made, it is evident that traditional culture plays a vital role, and further actions are required.

原文：Despite its simplicity, this picture conveys a deep message

批改：表达不错，加油

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：6/10

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