2014年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

2014年考研英语二大作文是启航考研英语备考清单中的必练题型。本文带来的高分批改范例，配套启航教育老师的逐句批注与预测话题标签，适合考研英语考生在冲刺阶段精读精练，是一套完整的写作提升资料。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the population change of residents who lived in city and lived in village in China from 1990 to 2010. In 1990, the number of residents who lived in city was 300 millions, but by 2000, the figure had substantially risen to 458 millions. In contrast, the number of residents who lived in village experienced a significant decline of 27 millions during the same time. Simultaneously, the number of residents who lived in city and lived in village remained stable and steady in 2010.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to living in city to promote their live qualities. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards life styles have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing number of people choose to live in city rather than to live in village. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of residents who live in city will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of residents who live in village will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： millions,

批改：300 millions → 300 million (单位用法错误)

原文：o 458 millions. In contrast, the number of residents who lived in village experienced a significant decline of 27 millions

批改：458 millions → 458 million (单位用法错误) 27 millions → 27 million (单位用法错误)

原文：e bar chart clearly depicts the population change of residents who lived in city and lived in village in China from 1990 to 2010. In 1990, the number of residents who lived in city was 300 millions, but by 2000, the figure had substantially risen to 458 millions. In contrast, the number of residents who lived in village experienced a significant decline of 27 millions during the same time. Simultaneously, the number of residents who lived in city and lived in village remained stable and steady in 2010.

批改：段基本完成了数据描述任务，但存在术语不专业、单位用法错误

原文：1990s an

批改：in 1990s → in the 1990s (缺少定冠词)

原文：omote their live

批改：promote their live qualities → improve their quality of life (搭配不当)

原文： life styles

批改：life styles → lifestyles (拼写错误)

原文：o live in city

批改：to live in city → to live in cities (单复数错误)

原文：e core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to living in city to promote their live qualities. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards life styles have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing number of people choose to live in city rather than to live in village. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：本段从代际差异和观念变化角度分析，方向正确但深度不够

原文：residents who l

批改：residents who live in city → urban residents

原文：esidents who live

批改：residents who live in village → rural residents

原文：at about future trends? I am confident that the number of residents who live in city will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of residents who live in village will likely continue to decrease.

批改：结尾段预测方向正确

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分

总评：

同学，你好！这篇作文结构完整，能够准确把握图表的主要趋势，展现了你对图表作文基本框架的理解。

主要优点：

文章结构清晰，三段式布局合理

能够准确识别城乡人口变化的主要趋势

分析角度基本正确

待改进方面：

数据准确性：需要确保所有数据描述的准确性

语言专业性：应使用更标准的术语如"urban/rural"

论述深度：原因分析可以更加具体和深入

优化建议：

提升语言专业性

使用"urban and rural population"代替冗长的表达

确保数字单位的正确使用

深化原因分析

具体说明城市在就业机会、教育资源、医疗服务等方面的优势

分析工业化、经济发展对人口流动的影响

丰富结尾段落

可提及城镇化进程的阶段性特征

适当展望乡村振兴与城镇化的协调发展

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