启航教育在考研英语写作教学中反复强调:词汇与句式的高级化是考研英语作文高分的关键。本文整理的2011年考研英语二批改范例,几乎每一段都包含高分替换词与衔接词,是考研英语二作文范文写作锦囊中的代表性范文。
一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)
二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly dipicts the changes of the proportion of some series in the cars market in China from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese cars was approximately 25%, but by 2009, the rate had risen to about 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese cars experienced decline of about 10%during the same period. Simultaneously, the proportion of American cars remained stable and steady.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To sart with, as the conductor orchestraing the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to product and innovate Chinese cars, enableing people to have more better and choose Chinese cars. Against the backdrop of our country's rapid and dynamic development, the people are accustomed to using domestic cars.
What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese cars will steadily increase in the following dacades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese cars and American cars will likely continue to decrease and remain stable respectively.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:he bar chart clearly dipicts the changes of the proportion of some series in the cars market in China from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese cars was approximately 25%, but by 2009, the rate had risen to about 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese cars experienced decline of about 10%during the same period. Simultaneously, the proportion of American cars remained stable and steady.
批改:能够准确地描绘出图表的信息,句子连贯完整。
原文:more better and
批改:more opportunities to
原文:e core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To sart with, as the conductor orchestraing the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to product and innovate Chinese cars, enableing people to have more better and choose Chinese cars. Against the backdrop of our country's rapid and dynamic development, the people are accustomed to using domestic cars.
批改:能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因,全面细致。
原文:What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese cars will steadily increase in the following dacades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese cars and American cars will likely continue to decrease and remain stable respectively.
批改:能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:12/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,无拼写错误;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变,但是要注意句子结构的完整连贯;
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的很认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。要注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。
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