考研英语一2017年大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2017年考研英语一大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left hand cartoon, there is a young man, lying in the sofa and saying that he has so many books. On the contrary, in the right-hand potrayal, a man says to himself "I will finish 20 books this year "with a sweet smile on his face. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future, while daydreaming is the shackle that hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking

in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, in modern society full of changes,and challenges,and chances ,being practical has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people,and its significance has become increasingly evident . On the other hand, daydreaming is like a heavy chain that hinders our progress, leaving us with a negative outlook on life and preventing us from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, being practical is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydreaming to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： left hand

批改：记得中间加连字符

原文：himself

批改：加逗号

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图画内容, 表达的主题和图画也是贴合的

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

批改：语法正确

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

原文：year

批改：加逗号

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：18分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：不存在语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：细节问题多注意，标点使用要规范。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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