对于考研英语一而言,2011年大作文常以图画形式呈现。本文精解的这篇图画批改范例,启航教育老师逐句解读图画细节、寓意提炼与评论展开三步走,是考研英语作文话题图画作文的经典教学样本。
一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目
考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)
二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depicts the percentage of parts of cars in our country"s market. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brand was
approximately 26%, but by 2009, this figure had risen to around 31%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a decline about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is going through an extensive and profound transformation. In different views, the significate reason for this phenomenon is the huge progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to the revolution of cars. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born is the 1900s, are accustomed to purchasing automobiles of Chinese brand and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
what about future trends? I am confident that the percentage of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the percentage of foreign brands will likely continue to decrease.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:the percentage of parts of cars
批改:不是“汽车的部分的百分比”,而是“汽车市场的份额” 改为:market share of car brands
原文:significate
批改:significant
原文:revolution of cars
批改:改为 the automotive revolution 或 the transformation of the auto industry会贴近准确的英语表达
原文:1900s
批改:1990s
原文:what
批改:句首大写
原文:brand
批改:brands
原文:brand
批改:brands
原文:brand
批改:brands
原文:brand
批改:brands
原文:In different views
批改:一般搭配为 “In my view” 、 “From different perspectives”
原文:is
批改:in
原文:automobiles of Chinese brand
批改:表述生硬,可改为 “domestic cars” 或 “Chinese-brand automobiles”
原文:The bar chart clearly depicts the percentage of parts of cars in our country"s market. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brand was approximately 26%, but by 2009, this figure had risen to around 31%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a decline about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable.
批改:准确描述国产升、日系降、美系持平的趋势
原文:The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is going through an extensive and profound transformation. In different views, the significate reason for this phenomenon is the huge progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to the revolution of cars. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born is the 1900s, are accustomed to purchasing automobiles of Chinese brand and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
批改:用“产业进步+年轻消费”双因解释,逻辑合理
原文:what about future trends? I am confident that the percentage of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the percentage of foreign brands will likely continue to decrease.
批改:简短预测未来趋势
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:9/15
1.题目要求:字数符合题目要求。文章需要分析图表并写出自己的观点,符合题目要求。
2.语言表达:语言表达清晰。但还有些拼写问题和语法错误,有些表达不符合英语表达方式,考生需要多加注意。
3.内容层面:文章的结构清晰,有明确的开头、中间和结尾,逻辑连贯。
4.修改意见:这篇文章有效地分析了图表信息,并提供了原因和未来趋势的预测。尽管存在一些语法和拼写错误,但文章的整体结构和逻辑是清晰的。建议考生在写作时认真检查,注意语法和单词的准确性,并学习常见的英语表达方式。
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