2011年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

本文整理了2011年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语作文真题范文的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes of our country in market of some car brands from 2008-2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic car was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese car experience a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simaltaneously, the percentage of American car remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic car and have become the primary cousumer group. In addition, chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by china"s car manufacturing industry in responding to these changes .Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising. what about future trends？I am confident that the proportion of domnestic car will steadiy increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Janpanse car and American car will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： of our country in market of some car brands

批改：注意表达的顺序，改为 in market shares of some car brands in our country

原文： car

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 cars

原文：car

批改：改为 cars

原文：experience

批改：此处为过去式，改为 experienced

原文： car

批改：改为 cars

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

原文：car

批改：改为复数 cars

原文：chinese

批改：专有名词实词的首字母大写，改为 Chinese

原文： china"s

批改：专有名词实词的首字母大写，改为 China"s

批改：此处写为第二段，内容表达不错，也比较具体

原文：what

批改：首字母大写

原文：domnestic

批改：domestic

原文： car

批改：改为复数 cars

原文：car

批改：改为 cars

原文：car

批改：改为 cars

批改：结尾段内容表达不错，预测也很合理

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：内容比较丰富具体，结构上建议写为三段式

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2.拼写要细心 3. 首字母大小写要规范，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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