2011年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

2011年考研英语二大作文是考研英语作文模板备考清单中的必练题型。本文带来的高分批改范例，配套启航教育老师的逐句批注与预测话题标签，适合考研英语考生在冲刺阶段精读精练，是一套完整的写作提升资料。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly clepicts the market propotion of several brands among domestic car market. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 25%,but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 34%. In contrast , the percentage of Japanese brands experienced a significant decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation . In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s auto manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. The cars made in China that have more outstanding advantages are substituting the Japanese cars even American cars.In addition,against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s , are accustomed to buying domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of foreign cars will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：among

批改：用in

原文：The bar chart clearly clepicts the market propotion of several brands among domestic car market. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 25%,but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 34%. In contrast , the percentage of Japanese brands experienced a significant decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation . In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s auto manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. The cars made in China that have more outstanding advantages are substituting the Japanese cars even American cars.In addition,against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s , are accustomed to buying domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of foreign cars will likely continue to decrease.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，注意介词的正确使用；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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