考研英语一2023年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2023年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2023年大作文题目

考研英语一2023年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay based on the picture below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2023年大作文批改例文

As shown in the picture, there are two teams having a dragon boat race and many people are watching the competition on the land and the bridge. In addition, there is an old man and an old woman on the right of the picture saying " Fantastic, our village"s dragon boat race is becoming more and more hot." Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that traditional culture is becoming more popular and attracts many people.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, traditional culture plays an important part in every Chinese people"s life, not only the dragon boat race, but also guessing lantern riddles attract more people to enjoy the traditional culture. What"s more, this phenomenon shows that our cultural confidence is increasing.

In brief, traditional culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：As shown in the picture, there are two teams having a dragon boat race and many people are watching the competition on the land and the bridge. In addition, there is an old man and an old woman on the right of the picture saying " Fantastic, our village"s dragon boat race is becoming more and more hot." Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that traditional culture is becoming more popular and attracts many people.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：people"s

批改：every后加名词单数，people是集合名词是复数，改成person"s

原文：attract

批改：动名词做主语，谓语单三，attracts

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, traditional culture plays an important part in every Chinese people"s life, not only the dragon boat race, but also guessing lantern riddles attract more people to enjoy the traditional culture. What"s more, this phenomenon shows that our cultural confidence is increasing.

批改：能够使用逻辑关系词分点论述传统文化的重要性，结构清晰。

原文：In brief, traditional culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit.

批改：无语言错误，但是可以在增加一些内容使得论述更全面。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意名词的单复数；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意动名词做主语谓单。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好，另外，最后一段内容稍微少一些，可以在增加一至两句话。继续加油。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语作文批改写作提分的可靠方案。