2013年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2013年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二作文模板教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the number of part-time students at school.The number of senior students takes the lead at 88.24%,followed by the number of junior students at 71.93%. Additionally ,factors such as the number of sophomore and freshman are also considered,accounting for 71.13%and 67.77%,respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes,our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound social system,enabling university students to have ample opportunities for contacting different work.In addition,an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes,challenges,and chances,experience is indispensable if they want to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends?I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of undergraduate，serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：e bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the number of part-time students at school.The number of senior students takes the lead at 88.24%,followed by the number of junior students at 71.93%. Additionally ,factors such as the number of sophomore and freshman are also considered,accounting for 71.13%and 67.77%,respectively.

批改：本段准确地描述了图表的核心数据，涵盖了四个年级的兼职学生比例，并正确指出了随年级增长而上升的趋势。信息完整，逻辑清晰。

原文：hat about future trends?I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of undergraduate，serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：结尾段尝试预测未来趋势，基本完成任务。

原文：71.13%and 67.77%

批改：逗号和句号后应空格，如 88.24%, followed，Additionally, factors

原文：undergraduate

批改：undergraduate → 应使用复数形式 undergraduates

原文：serving as a mi

批改：serving as... 这个分词短语的逻辑主语是 figures（数据），但“数据”本身不能作为“时代缩影”，逻辑主语不当。应修改为 which serves as...

原文：he core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes,our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound social system,enabling university students to have ample opportunities for contacting different work.In addition,an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes,challenges,and chances,experience is indispensable if they want to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising

批改：本段进行了具体论证

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分

题目要求：基本完成了试题规定的任务。包含了所有内容要点，但漏掉了对“年级越高，兼职比例越高”这一核心趋势的深层原因分析。

语言表达：

语法与词汇：使用了一些较丰富的语法结构和词汇，语言基本正确。但在试图使用复杂结构或高级词汇时有个别错误。

句式方面：句式有变化

内容层面：

结构与完整性：结构清晰。

修改建议

核心建议：让论证逻辑紧扣图表数据。

可以从下面的方面进行论证

课程压力：低年级通识课业重，高年级课程安排更灵活。

职业准备：高年级学生面临就业，更需要通过兼职积累经验、丰富简历。

技能与自信：随着专业知识的积累，高年级学生更有能力胜任专业相关的兼职。

优化语言细节：注意标点符号、名词单复数等基础问题，避免不必要的失分。

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