考研英语二2016年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

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一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart cleary displays the percentage breakdown of a survey on the travel purpose of students at a certain university.Enjoying scenery takes the lead at 37%,followed by releasing stress at 33%.additionally,factors such as making friends,fostering independence and other are also considered,accounting for 9%,6% and 15%,respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,As the saying goes,”On life’s stage,pressure is always present.” Nowadays,university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure,and as a result,travel has emerged as their significant for utilizing leisure time.In addition,travel can bring joy and fostering independence to out live.Considering there factors,the deoicted phenomenon in the chart is unsuprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university’students ,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The pie chart cleary displays the percentage breakdown of a survey on the travel purpose of students at a certain university.Enjoying scenery takes the lead at 37%,followed by releasing stress at 33%.additionally,factors such as making friends,fostering independence and other are also considered,accounting for 9%,6% and 15%,respectively.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：significant

批改：significant choice

原文：out live

批改：our life

原文：there

批改：these

原文：deoicted

批改：depicted

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,As the saying goes,”On life’s stage,pressure is always present.” Nowadays,university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure,and as a result,travel has emerged as their significant for utilizing leisure time.In addition,travel can bring joy and fostering independence to out live.Considering there factors,the deoicted phenomenon in the chart is unsuprising.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university’students ,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

语法：语言表达和语法基础上，进步的空间还很大。比如本次作文中出现多次的单词拼写错误等问题，会很拉低你的平均分。另外还需要注意一些基础的语法问题和表达搭配问题，有时间好好看看文中的批改，细心吸收，争取在接下来的练习中避免类似的错误。

首段总体概括图表主题，详细列出关键数据变化；第二段分析原因，可从社会就业压力增大、学生追求自我实现等方面进行论述；第三段评论与展望，预测未来趋势可能持续，并强调其对个人和社会发展的积极意义。

文章整体来说，言简意赅，符合了考试写作提纲的要求，文章表示语义衔接的词语运用不太多，在以后的写作中可以多尝试使用一些表示衔接的词语，这样文章段落内部句内和段落之间的关系就能很明朗的表现出来。同时注意避免单纯罗列数据，可适当引用社会现象或政策背景支持分析，增强说服力。

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