考研英语一2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一作文模板每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2011年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are two tourists cruising and throwing rubbish into the river already filled with trash. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environmental pollution is an issule that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significent. To protect the environment holds exceptional significance for a nation, as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for safegurding public health, further propelling social stability and sustainable development. Tragically, although the lack of clear rules and behavioral standards might contribute to this phenomenon, its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals, in their pursuit of economic interests, have disregarded the virtue of integrity.

How can we put an end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including issuing related regulations and enhancing supervision. But would these measures be comprehensive enough? In readlity, we also need to strengthening self-discipline with the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图画内容, 表达的主题和图画也是贴合的

原文：already filled with trash

批改：filled with trash 是一个过去分词短语，它具备形容词性，但不能直接放在名词后面，此处要将定语从句补全，改为 that is already filled with trash

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

原文：integrity

批改：这幅图画的主题词是环境保护，此处要改为 environmental protection

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体，注意论述都是要围绕着主题词来写的，要表达准确

批改：语法正确

原文： to strengthening

批改：此处为动词不定式 to do 结构，改为 to strengthen

原文：self-discipline

批改：此处一句话说完，加句号

原文：with

批改：前面加了句号，此处首字母大写

原文： readlity

批改：reality

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法和表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心 3. 标点使用和首字母大小写要规范。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，尽量多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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