2015年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2015年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The pie chart depicts the percentage breakdown of expenditure of our residents in Spring Festival vacation at a certain city in our country. The percentage of New Year"s presents takes the lead at 40%. Transports, having meals together and others, have the same percentage at 20%.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon are summarized as follows. First and foremost, in the wake of the rapid development in our society, people have changed their way of consumption. They are willing to buy some delicate gifts to their relatives to express the congratulations to each other. In addition, the outbreak of COVID-19 has made a significant influence on people"s behaviors and choices. An increasing number of individuals begin to concern about their health and decrease the frequency of having meals together. According to these reason, the depicted phenomenon is not surprising.

What about future trends. I am confident that the chart precisely and truthfully reflects the selaction of people nowadays, and it would be relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：having meals together

批改：聚餐用dinner parties更恰当~

原文：,

批改：逗号应删除

原文：The pie chart depicts the percentage breakdown of expenditure of our residents in Spring Festival vacation at a certain city in our country. The percentage of New Year"s presents takes the lead at 40%. Transports, having meals together and others, have the same percentage at 20%.

批改：对图表的描述全面准确，注意个别用词和标点

原文：to

批改：buy sth for sb为固定搭配。介词要用for

原文：made

批改：exert influence on为 固定搭配，应该为exerted

原文：reason

批改：这里要用复数reasons

原文：concern

批改：concern表示“使...担忧”，这里应改为care

批改：问号

原文：selaction

批改：selection

原文：would

批改：时态应该用一般将来时will

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon are summarized as follows. First and foremost, in the wake of the rapid development in our society, people have changed their way of consumption. They are willing to buy some delicate gifts to their relatives to express the congratulations to each other. In addition, the outbreak of COVID-19 has made a significant influence on people"s behaviors and choices. An increasing number of individuals begin to concern about their health and decrease the frequency of having meals together. According to these reason, the depicted phenomenon is not surprising.

批改：从消费方式和健康意识两个角度解释了图表中的现象，注意个别语法问题

原文：What about future trends. I am confident that the chart precisely and truthfully reflects the selaction of people nowadays, and it would be relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：表达个人观点，注意拼写和时态

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

题目要求：对图表信息描绘全面准确，个人观点和论述内容符合题意；

语言表达：全文用了一些经典句式，但语法错误和拼写错误也较多，表达效果有待提高。如果目前还不能准确使用例句，也可以尝试用自己的语言表达，锻炼下语法水平，语法水平提升后再套用模板效果更好；

行文逻辑：第一段描述图表内容，第二段展开详细论述，第三段表达个人观点，架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；继续多多积累经典句式；提升语法水平；

同学还有进步的空间，继续加油啊~

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