2014年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2014年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二作文范文话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The har chart clearly depicts the number of population change in City and countryside. In 1990, the number of population in countryside was 834, but by 2010, this figure had gradually decreased to 674. In contrast, the number of population in city experienced a slow increase 366 during the same period

The core reason for observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, The instructure of city had a great development from 1990 to 2010. The people who had a great happiness in the city. In addition, during the twenty years, more and more young people found that they could have a better future in city than countryside meanwhile, the countryside also couldn"t attract people to live in countryside. Considering these factors, the depicted phenonmenon in the bar chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I"m confident that the number of population in city will Steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of population in/ countryside will likely remain relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：e har chart

批改：应为 The bar chart (柱状图)。

原文：number of population in country

批改：用词与语法错误： the number of population change 是错误表达。地道的说法是 the changes in the population of urban and rural areas 或 the population changes in cities and the countryside。 City 和 countryside 作为泛指时，前面常加定冠词 the city 和 the countryside。

原文：rease 366 durin

批改：数据错误 & 表达错误： 数据错误：城市人口是从300 million增长到666 million，增长了 366 million。原文只写“366”会让人误解为2010年城市人口是366 million。 a slow increase：增长366 million是巨大的变化，不应是“缓慢的”。 句子结构不完整，increase后面缺少介词 of。

原文：r chart clearly depicts the number of population change in City and countryside. In 1990, the number of population in countryside was 834, but by 2010, this figure had gradually decreased to 674. In contrast, the number of population in city experienced a slow increase 366 during the same period

批改：本段成功识别了城乡人口变化的趋势。但数据的呈现（缺少单位、数值错误）和基础表达存在严重问题

原文：ore reason for observ

批改：语法错误：observed phenomenon 是特指，前面需要加定冠词 the。

原文：he instructure of city had a great dev

批改：拼写与用词： instructure 拼写错误，应为 infrastructure (基础设施)。 had a great development 是中式英语，更地道的表达是 was greatly developed 或 underwent significant development。

原文：y could have a better future in city

批改：in city than countryside 应补充为 in the city than in the countryside。 meanwhile 连接两个句子时，前面通常用分号或另起一句。 the countryside also couldn"t attract people to live in countryside 逻辑重复且消极，建议删除，聚焦于城市的吸引力。

原文：ore reason for observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, The instructure of city had a great development from 1990 to 2010. The people who had a great happiness in the city. In addition, during the twenty years, more and more young people found that they could have a better future in city than countryside meanwhile, the countryside also couldn"t attract people to live in countryside. Considering these factors, the depicted phenonmenon in the bar chart is unsurprising.

批改：本段的论点（城市发展、年轻人追求更好未来）是合理且切题的。但拼写错误和致命的句子结构错误使得论证无法有效展开。请务必确保写出的每一个句子都是完整的

原文： number of population i

批改：拼写错误：同上，应改为 the population in the city 和 the population in the countryside。删除多余的 /。

原文：ill Stea

批改：大小写错误：副词 steadily 不应大写。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分

总体修改建议

保证句子完整：这是写作的第一原则。确保每个句子都有主谓结构，能够独立表达一个完整的意思。

数据准确清晰：描述数据时，务必带上单位（如 million），并且确保数值计算正确。

夯实词汇基础：集中记忆一批高频主题词汇（如 bar chart, infrastructure, population) 并掌握其拼写和用法。

保持逻辑一致：结论的预测应基于前文阐述的趋势，不能前后矛盾。

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