2023年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2023年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二真题备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、2023年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2023年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe and interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2023年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly depicts the level of health literacy for our country"s residents from 2012 to 2021. In 2012 the percentage of health literacy was 8.80% ，but for 2021,this rate experienced a significant increase of 16.8%. Simaltaneously,the propotion of health literacy remained stable and steady from 2012 to 2015.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductors orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound eating health system, enabling the residents to have ample oppotunities for keeping their health literacy. In addition, an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenge and chance, a strong body is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurpring.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of health literacy is a clean sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The line chart clearly depicts the level of health literacy for our country"s residents from 2012 to 2021. In 2012 the percentage of health literacy was 8.80% ，but for 2021,this rate experienced a significant increase of 16.8%. Simaltaneously,the propotion of health literacy remained stable and steady from 2012 to 2015.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：conductors

批改：conductor 用单数形式 因为后面的主语是单数

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductors orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound eating health system, enabling the residents to have ample oppotunities for keeping their health literacy. In addition, an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenge and chance, a strong body is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurpring.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：unsurpring

批改：unsurprising

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of health literacy is a clean sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

首段总体概括图表主题，呈现中国居民健康素养水平的显著提升。第二段原因分析，可从公共医疗体系和基础设施建设加强、民众对个人健康的日益重视等角度展开。第三段可结合当前趋势，合理推测未来的发展方向，同时建议政府继续扩大卫生服务范围以持续提升全民健康素养水平。

文章整体来说，言简意赅，符合了考试写作提纲的要求，文章表示语义衔接的词语运用不太多，在以后的写作中可以多尝试使用一些表示衔接的词语，这样文章段落内部句内和段落之间的关系就能很明朗的表现出来。同时注意避免单纯罗列数据，可适当引用社会现象或政策背景支持分析，增强说服力。

考研英语二真题写作提分高效的方式，是让经验丰富的老师亲自批改你的作文。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，主讲斌哥亲批每一份学员作业，真题作业批改、轻松应对各种复杂题目，让考研英语写作更有底。