2011年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语二写作冲刺每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2011年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts some cars" sale condition in China in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of China-made was 25%, but by 2009, this figure had gradually risen to 30%. In contrast, the percentage of Japan-made experience a significant deckine of 10% during the same period. Simulataneously, the number of America-made remain stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinses society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to build a sound industry system, enabling companies to have ample opportunities for innovation. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about furture trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of Chinese, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：China-made

批改："China-made"是一个形容词，意思是"中国制造的"，此处应为一个名词短语，改为 China-made cars

原文：Japan-made

批改：改为 Japan-made cars

原文：experience

批改：此处要使用过去式，改为 experienced

原文：deckine

批改：decline

原文：America-made

批改：改为 America-made cars

原文：number

批改：改为 percentage 更合适

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

原文：Chinses

批改：Chinese

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

批改：语法正确

批改：内容表达很好，原因分析也很到位

原文：furture

批改：future

原文：remain

批改：remain 是持续系动词，此处后面要加的是形容词，改为 remain stable

原文：Chinese

批改：改为 the Chinese people

批改：内容表达不错，多注意语法和拼写问题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在一些语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，尽量多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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