2021年考研英语二大作文写作方向与示例

启航教育在考研英语写作教学中反复强调：词汇与句式的高级化是考研英语作文高分的关键。本文整理的2021年考研英语二批改范例，几乎每一段都包含高分替换词与衔接词，是考研英语二大作文写作锦囊中的代表性范文。

一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart obviously reveals the proportion about the variety of ways to exercise in a certain city.The chart consists of four sectors and displays the percentage breakdown of the variety ways. Among them, exercise alone rank first, accounting for 54.3%, followed by training with friends at 47.7%. Additionally, factors such as training with family numbers and playing with groups are also considered, constituting 23.9% and 15.8% respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards ways of exercise have undergone significant changes. People become to enjoy living alone and work by myself. This is best illustrated by the fact that an increasing number of people choose exercise alone rather than doing with others. Another crucial cause that cannot be ignored is that advancements in science and technology have provided a technical foundation for the convenience of doing exercise alone. Because there are an increasing number of AI robots to give assistance, thereby reducing restrictions.

From what has been discussed above, we predict that the rising proportion is likely to continue for several years in the foreseeable future. And it will lay a solid foundation for the healthy advancement of our society in the long term.

（疑惑：要求150，一般写180，但是我这一写就220+了，是不是有点多了啊）

（还有，有时候一行那个空剩了一点还是塞不下我下面要写的那个词了，怎么般，那就让他空着一点？）

（都说不能上考场先编，但是题出的不一样看的得要编自己来解释的部分嘛）

（现在还有啥建议不老师）

《麻烦自己点评一下，剩的次数越来越少了，谢谢老师～》

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：exercise

批改：exercising 动名词

原文： about the variety of ways to exercise

批改：可以再简洁些of exercise preferences​ among residents

原文：rank

批改：三单ranks

原文：training

批改：training是训练，改为working out

原文： training with family numbers and playing

批改：training和playing可改为Exercising and taking group activities，避免重复

原文：The bar chart obviously reveals the proportion about the variety of ways to exercise in a certain city.The chart consists of four sectors and displays the percentage breakdown of the variety ways. Among them, exercise alone rank first, accounting for 54.3%, followed by training with friends at 47.7%. Additionally, factors such as training with family numbers and playing with groups are also considered, constituting 23.9% and 15.8% respectively.

批改：较为准确描述了图表内容。

原文：living alone and work by myself

批改：后面work用ing形式，简化为living and working out alone. 人们肯定不用myself，最起码也是对应themselves

原文：exercise

批改：动名词 exercising

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards ways of exercise have undergone significant changes. People become to enjoy living alone and work by myself. This is best illustrated by the fact that an increasing number of people choose exercise alone rather than doing with others. Another crucial cause that cannot be ignored is that advancements in science and technology have provided a technical foundation for the convenience of doing exercise alone. Because there are an increasing number of AI robots to give assistance, thereby reducing restrictions.

批改：有自己的观点，很棒

原文：or several years

批改：可以删除，避免冗余

原文：From what has been discussed above, we predict that the rising proportion is likely to continue for several years in the foreseeable future. And it will lay a solid foundation for the healthy advancement of our society in the long term.

批改：观点独到

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15分。

0. 先说这篇文章，能灵活运用模板，自己写的句型和词汇非常丰富，很赞，不过非谓语的知识再练练。下面回答其他问题：

1. 同学要是对自己的基础很自信，220字没问题。如果不自信，180左右即可，避免多写多错，

2. 可以在单词中间加连字符让它衔接到下一行，尽量边写边控制空间。

3. 题目不一样肯定要编的，现在多看看老师的模板怎么描述开头，比如漫画怎么描述，百分比怎么描述，图表怎么描述，还有英一2025年空调，冰箱那一篇作文，尽量多存储模板，到时候编起来很省劲儿。

4. 加油，你的实力挺强的。

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