2014年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2014年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the change in the urban populations and rural populations in China from 1990 to 2010. The number of urban populations was 300million, but by 2010, the figure had risen to 666. In contrast, the number of rural populations experienced decline of 160million during the same time.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made immense effort to build the more better environment of cities , enabling rural people to go to work in big city. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer content with simply material demand, they also pursue the better quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of people want to live in big cities rather than countrysides. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban populations will steadily increase in the following decades. in contrast, the number of the rural populations will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：an populations and rural populations in China from 1990 to 2010. The number of urban populations was 300million, but by 2010, the figure had risen to 666. I

批改：urban populations → urban population (术语使用错误，population在此语境为不可数名词) 300million → 300 million (数字与单位间需空格) 666 → 666 million (数据不完整，缺少单位)

原文：experienced decline of 160million during the same time.

批改：experienced decline → experienced a decline (缺少冠词) 160million → 160 million (数字与单位间需空格)

原文：r chart clearly depicts the change in the urban populations and rural populations in China from 1990 to 2010. The number of urban populations was 300million, but by 2010, the figure had risen to 666. In contrast, the number of rural populations experienced decline of 160million during the same time

批改：本段基本完成了数据描述任务

原文：mmense effort to build the more better environment of cities , enabling rural people to go to work in big city

批改：immense effort → tremendous efforts (搭配不当) the more better → a better (语法错误)

原文：ig cities rather than countrysides. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the ch

批改：big city → cities (单复数错误) simply material demand → mere material satisfaction (用词不当) countryside → the countryside (缺少冠词)

原文：e core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made immense effort to build the more better environment of cities , enabling rural people to go to work in big city. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer content with simply material demand, they also pursue the better quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of people want to live in big cities rather than countrysides. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：本段分析角度尚可，但语言表达问题较多

原文：hat about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban populations will steadily increase in the following decades. in contrast, the number of the rural populations will likely continue to decrease.

批改：urban populations → urban population (术语错误) in contrast → In contrast (首字母未大写) the rural populations → rural population (术语和冠词错误)

原文：at about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban populations will steadily increase in the following decades. in contrast, the number of the rural populations will likely continue to decreas

批改：结尾段预测合理

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分

同学，你好！你的作文结构清晰，能够准确把握图表的主要趋势，这是很好的基础。为了向更高分数冲刺，请关注以下方面：

主要优点：

三段式结构完整清晰

准确识别了城乡人口变化趋势

分析角度基本合理

待改进方面：

专业术语使用：需要准确掌握"population"的用法

数据表述规范：注意单位书写和数据的完整性

论述的精准度：避免空洞比喻，分析要更具体深入

优化建议：

规范术语与数据

统一使用"urban population"和"rural population"

确保数字与单位间有空格，数据完整

深化原因分析

从经济发展、就业机会、公共服务等具体角度分析

避免使用华而不实的修辞

提升语言质量

注意冠词使用和名词单复数

避免中式英语表达

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