2019年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2019年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文话题写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、2019年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2019年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2019年考研英语二大作文批改例文

This is a column chart, clearly illustracting the strike constracts in undergrade after graduate target in a certain university from 2013 to 2018. Overall, compared with 2013, have job students" proportion become low, take higher study and initiate themselfes’ company become high. Such statistic, apparently have job also is the first choose for student. But enter a higher school and initiate company become a more important choose.

What results in the difference above? In the era of booming. corporate"s need become higher. Compared with undergrade"s enable, corporate"s need is a higher standard. So alarge number choose enter a higher school that they can accumlate more knowledge. For another, in this time context, pace and develpment is the subject of era. Our country"s enconomy develp fast, this give studen mang chances to chase their dream. This make initiate"s proportition have double for 2013

As a undergrade the purpose of enter a higher school. I think it is adviseable for taking more study. This make me better understanding of the world leads to a richer life

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：illustracting

批改：“illustrates”（动词三单形式）

原文：constracts

批改：拼写错误 “contrasts”

原文：after graduate

批改：post-graduation”（“毕业后的”，形容词短语作定语）

原文：undergrade

批改：“undergraduates”（复数形式，指代群体）

原文：have job students" proportion

批改：改为 “the proportion of students choosing to work full-time”（“选择全职工作的学生比例”，动名词短语作定语，语法正确）

原文：become low

批改：改为 “has decreased”（“下降”，现在完成时体现 “从 2013 到 2018 的变化”，更精准）

原文：take higher study

批改：改为 “pursuing further study” 继续深造

原文：initiate themselfes’ company

批改：改为 “starting their own businesses”（动名词短语与 “students” 构成逻辑主谓关系，保持结构一致）创业 start one"s own business

原文：statistic

批改：“statistics” 复数

原文：student

批改：“students”（复数指代全体学生）

原文：corporate"s

批改：改为 “enterprises”（复数形式，指代各类企业）

批改：逗号

原文：alarge

批改：改为 “a large number of students”（补充 “of students”，明确主语）

原文：choose enter a higher school

批改：改为 “choose to pursue further study”（“choose to do sth.” 固定搭配，“pursue further study” 为 “深造” 的标准表达）

原文：accumlate

批改：改为 “accumulate”

原文：develpment

批改：“development”

原文：develp

批改： 改为 “China’s economy has developed rapidly”（“中国经济发展迅速”，现在完成时体现持续影响，“developed” 为过去分词）

原文：,

批改：避免逗号连接两个独立分句

原文：enconomy

批改：“economy”

原文： mang

批改：many

原文：make

批改：makes 单三

原文： initiate"s proportition

批改：改为 “the proportion of students starting their own businesses”（动名词短语作定语，明确 “创业的学生比例”）

原文：a

批改：an

原文：it is adviseable for taking more study

批改：改为 “it is advisable to continue learning”（“it is advisable to do sth.” 固定搭配，“advisable” 为正确拼写，“continue learning” 比 “taking more study” 更地道）

原文：This is a column chart, clearly illustracting the strike constracts in undergrade after graduate target in a certain university from 2013 to 2018. Overall, compared with 2013, have job students" proportion become low, take higher study and initiate themselfes’ company become high. Such statistic, apparently have job also is the first choose for student. But enter a higher school and initiate company become a more important choose.

批改：描述图表内容，建议描述的时候可以带一些数据

原文：What results in the difference above? In the era of booming. corporate"s need become higher. Compared with undergrade"s enable, corporate"s need is a higher standard. So alarge number choose enter a higher school that they can accumlate more knowledge. For another, in this time context, pace and develpment is the subject of era. Our country"s enconomy develp fast, this give studen mang chances to chase their dream. This make initiate"s proportition have double for 2013

批改：提出了自己的观点，但是建议使用一些逻辑关系词，不然不知道提了几点建议

原文：As a undergrade the purpose of enter a higher school. I think it is adviseable for taking more study. This make me better understanding of the world leads to a richer life

批改：总结全文

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9

原文准确捕捉了 “某大学本科生 2013-2018 年毕业计划变化” 的核心数据（全职工作比例下降，深造、创业比例上升），搭建了基本框架，但存在严重影响得分的问题：语法 / 拼写错误频发（如 “illustracting”“themselfes”“enconomy”“accumlate” 等拼写错误，动名词作主语、时态使用等语法错误）加强单词的背诵和语法的学习，希望继续努力，加油！

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