启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌,每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2021年考研英语一大作文批改例文中,每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正,是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。
一、2021年考研英语一大作文题目
考研英语一2021年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below. In your essay, you should1)describe the picture briefly, 2)interpret the implied meaning, and 3)give your comments. Write your answer on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、2021年考研英语一大作文批改例文
As shown in the cartoon ,there is a boy,wearing the Monkey King uniform and saying to his father “daddy ,many classmates thought opera is boring ”,while his father saying “if you like it ,that’s enough ”Evidently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is persist to ourselves that plays an
important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society .
This phenomenon is thought provoking in several ways ,but two of them are particularly significant .First and foremost persistence can ignite our creativity ,and promote personal growth and self fulfillment ,thus making life rewarding and meaningful ,rather than being self consuming . What’s more in modern society full of changes ,chances and challenges ,perseverance has become a key quality that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people ,and its significance has become increasingly evident .
In brief,persistence is the catalyst for societal and personal development ,from which we all stand to benefit . Therefore , we should actively support and advocate this quality . Only by doing so can we make our world shine with renewed brilliance .
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:persist
批改:persisting 这里要用动名词形式
原文:As shown in the cartoon ,there is a boy,wearing the Monkey King uniform and saying to his father “daddy ,many classmates thought opera is boring ”,while his father saying “if you like it ,that’s enough ”Evidently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is persist to ourselves that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society .
批改:描述漫画内容,揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理,清晰直观。
原文:This phenomenon is thought provoking in several ways ,but two of them are particularly significant .First and foremost persistence can ignite our creativity ,and promote personal growth and self fulfillment ,thus making life rewarding and meaningful ,rather than being self consuming . What’s more in modern society full of changes ,chances and challenges ,perseverance has become a key quality that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people ,and its significance has become increasingly evident .
批改:以分论点的形式论述坚持自我的重要性,逻辑严谨,层次分明。
原文:In brief,persistence is the catalyst for societal and personal development ,from which we all stand to benefit . Therefore , we should actively support and advocate this quality . Only by doing so can we make our world shine with renewed brilliance
批改:联系自身,总结全文,升华主题
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:18/20
作文对漫画的理解到位,写作思路紧扣主题,有些短语句式的表达也不错,基本能够传达清楚作者的写作意图,但在以下几方面还需注意:
考试时可以多积累高级词汇,写作文就能用上,但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误,特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。
内容:本文可以从以下多个角度入手展开:坚持做自己喜欢的事情、自信、独立思考、不盲从、父母正确鼓励孩子等,用人生观的角度,都比较好展开;但如果只写传统文化,未涉及上述内容,就偏题了。
整体来看,作文理解了漫画内涵,段落框架明确,大体上与题目要求保持一致,同时也有一些细节问题,后续继续注重练习,加油!
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