考研英语一2024年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2024年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目

考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy saying "the new park is beautiful" while watching others running. Meanwhile, the right-hand chart shows that in 2020, the number of parks was 406; by 2022, this figure had risen substantially to 670.

One reason for this observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as society advances at a high speed, people are no longer satisfied with mere material comfort; they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why many people are willing to run in parks. In addition, more and more people believe that in a modern society full of changes, challenges and opportunities, physical health is indispensable if they wish to achieve long-term success. Given these factors, the trend depicted in the chart is not surprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of parks will continue to increase steadily in the coming decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：开头段内容表达很清晰

原文：this

批改：改为 the, 表示特指

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文：the number of parks

批改：改为 the number of exercise participants and that of parks 更合适，将图画图表的内容可以预测完整

批改：结尾段表达不错

原文：One reason

批改：下列写了两个原因，此处改为 Two reasons

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：存在几处细节表达问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：细节表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语写作模板写作提分的可靠方案。