考研英语一2024年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2024年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语一写作冲刺备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目

考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy, standing proudly in the park fitness area and saying,“The newly renovated park near my home is really nice!”In the right-hand bar chart, the number of parks in a certain city experienced a significant increase of 264 from 2020 to 2022.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follow. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue physical health. This explains why an increasing number of people choose exercise in the park, rather than at home option. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build many parks, enabling people to relax and exercise freely. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of exerciser and parks will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：hand cartoon, there is a boy, standing proudly in the park fitness area and saying,“The newly renovated park near my home is really nice!”In the right-hand bar chart, the number of parks in a certain city experienced a significant increase of 264 from 2020

批改：你对漫画和图表的描述准确到位，信息提取完整

原文：as follow. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue physical health. This explains why an increasing number of people choose exercise in the park, rather than at home option. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has

批改：as follow -> as follows (固定搭配) choose exercise -> choose to exercise (固定搭配 choose to do sth.) at home option 表达不自然，直接使用 staying at home 更为简洁地道。 as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes 这个比喻极具文采，是全文的亮点之一。

原文：terial satisfaction; they also pursue physical health. This explains why an increasing number of people choose exercise in the park, rather than at home option. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build many parks, enabling people to relax and exercise freely. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：这真是一段高质量的论证！你的分析视角深刻，逻辑链条完整，语言表达上也展现了很强的功力。仅需修正几处微小的语法和搭配，这个段落就无可挑剔了。

原文：uture trends? I am confident that the number of exerciser and parks will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：尾段简洁有力地预测了未来，圆满完成了任务。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17

同学，你这篇作文的质量非常高，已经具备了考研作文满分档位的绝大多数特质：立意深刻、逻辑严谨、语言地道且富有文采。

你的作文已经非常完美。如果非要提出建议，那就是在追求“卓越”的道路上，关注那些最微小的细节：

极致的准确性：确保如 as follows, choose to do 这类固定搭配的100%正确。这是顶尖作文的必备要素。

用词的绝对精准：在词汇选择上，不仅要“正确”，还要寻求“最贴切”的表达，比如对 exerciser 的优化。

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