启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌,每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2024年考研英语一大作文批改例文中,每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正,是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。
一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目
考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文
In the left-hand picture there are two people running in a park and a boy is praising the park.In the right-hand picture, there is a bar chart showing an increase of the number of parks in one city in recent years.Evidently, the picture intends to show that parks play a special role in improving the quality of citizens’ lives.
This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant.First and foremost,parks allow people to escape the noisy crowds and release their nervousness and fatigue.What is more,neglecting the building of parks is like a heavy chain that hinders citizens’ progress,leaving them with a negative outlook on life,which will directly lead to the hindrance of cities’ ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth.
In brief,setting up enough parks can maintain and support the healthy development of both society and every citizen,from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore, we should actively support and advocate the practice.Only by doing so can we ensure that the achievements of urban development entirely benefit the citizens themselves.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:In the left-hand picture there are two people running in a park and a boy is praising the park.In the right-hand picture, there is a bar chart showing an increase of the number of parks in one city in recent years.Evidently, the picture intends to show that parks play a special role in improving the quality of citizens’ lives.
批改:能够清晰全面的描绘出图画中展示的内容并点明主题,句子结构连贯。
原文:This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant.First and foremost,parks allow people to escape the noisy crowds and release their nervousness and fatigue.What is more,neglecting the building of parks is like a heavy chain that hinders citizens’ progress,leaving them with a negative outlook on life,which will directly lead to the hindrance of cities’ ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth.
批改:该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述,语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子,值得表扬。
原文:In brief,setting up enough parks can maintain and support the healthy development of both society and every citizen,from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore, we should actively support and advocate the practice.Only by doing so can we ensure that the achievements of urban development entirely benefit the citizens themselves.
批改:能够提出自己的建议,起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:18/20
内容切题,全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面,无拼写错误;句式方面,句子结构完整连贯;语法方面,语法基础很好。逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,结构清晰。
修改建议:可以看出作文完成的非常认真,无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰,值得表扬。继续加油。
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