考研英语一作文范文每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2017年考研英语一批改范例,从生活实际出发,紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图(表)描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。
一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目
考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文
Graphically portrayed in the cartoons is a vivid glimpse into the significance of practice. To be specific, in the left-hand picture, there is a person lying on the sofa who says proudly that he has many books. In stark contrast, in the right-hand cartoon, a student is planning to read more than 20 books this year.
Taking a holistic view, the picture encapsulates a profound message: What seems the most essential is practice. In an era changed by rapid social change, the convenience of acquiring books offers people various chances to acquire knowledge. However, people are wired to buy books. That helps explain why many people ignore the significance of the inner of books. Ultimately, practice is the very condition to achieve success, while a lost sense of practice may reduce our capacity, eroding the very foundations of a fulfilling life.
In a nutshell, it is advisable for people to read more books and to understand the essence of books. Such sustained efforts pave the way for the bright future.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:phically portrayed in the cartoons is a vivid glimpse into the significance of practice. To be specific, in the left-hand picture, there is a person lying on the sofa who says proudly that he has many books. In stark contrast, in the right-hand cartoon, a student is planning to read more than 20 books this year.
批改:开篇句式多样,避免了千篇一律的“The picture shows...”,非常棒
原文:ing a holistic view, the picture encapsulates a profound message: What seems the most essential is practice. In an era changed by rapid social change, the convenience of acquiring books offers people various chances to acquire knowledge. However, people are wired to buy books. That helps explain why many people ignore the significance of the inner of books. Ultimately, practice is the very condition to achieve success, while a lost sense of practice may reduce our capacity, eroding the very foundations of a fulfilling life.
批改:本段成功阐释了漫画的深层含义,并尝试分析原因,逻辑清晰。
原文:anged by rapid social chan
批改:“changed by rapid social change”中,“changed”与“change”重复,可以调整为“characterized by”(以...为特征),使表达更优。
原文:utshell, it is advisable for people to read more books and to understand the essence of books. Such sustained efforts pave the way for the bright future.
批改:结尾段总结全文,并指出了持续努力的重要性
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:16
你的作文内容切题,结构严谨,并成功使用了丰富的语法结构和高级词汇。主要的提升空间在于让论述的每一步都更紧密地围绕核心论点展开。
总评与建议:
同学,你这篇作文最让老师欣赏的是你地道的开篇和成熟的语言风格。你驾驭复杂句式和高阶词汇的能力很强。
当前,我们可以集中精力提升论述的集中度与穿透力。你的语言工具很好,现在需要让每一次论证都精准地服务于核心主题。我的核心建议是:
深化逻辑衔接:在抛出“people are wired to buy books”这样精彩的论点后,可以更进一步,直接点明这种心理如何导致了“只拥有不实践”的普遍困境,从而让因果链条更加坚实。
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